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Tournament: PLATINUM HIT 5 [FINALE] [Looking for new host! App inside!]
Member Since: 10/18/2010
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HINTS  :
1. We're not safe anymore
2. They're overtaking us
3. I'm afraid
4. They're sickening
5. Don't hold back
6. I don't believe this
7. Not gonna make it
8. I don't understand
9. They're coming
10. Can't give up
11. Look behind you!
12. AAAAAAAAAHHHH!!!!!
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Member Since: 5/6/2012
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Da**** 
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Member Since: 9/15/2012
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Giving me the Tymps. vibes.
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Member Since: 8/31/2013
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I think I cracked the code  I'm boarding my plane in 90 mins and hope results are up by then
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Member Since: 10/18/2010
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Originally posted by Tymps.
Giving me the Tymps. vibes.
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You noticed… 
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Member Since: 9/15/2012
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
You noticed… |
It's ironic because I still have no idea what the clues mean.
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Member Since: 10/18/2010
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Huga couldn't be bothered to comment  (get over your hangover soon), so you get me and Jack this time!
 PeopleLikeUs - Youre the Reason
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Originally posted by Jack Lees
It was really sweet and cute. It was relatable as a love song and that’s the kind of thing people are looking to sell. Not your best, but I enjoyed it, good job!
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
It never feels quite right reading your songs. They don't seem put together well. I wanna look back at your work and say, "oh, you've improved", but really it just stays the course and doesn't get better or worse. I need you to make an effort to get better.
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Prometheus. - Lights
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Originally posted by Jack Lees
Honestly, the lyrics are quite basic, but it works in your favour. I imagine this booming melody and reading them I had the most amazing melody in my head. Again, not my favourite from you, but good job!
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
There wasn't much substance; you pretty much described a very typical Friday night, IMO. I'm waiting for you to push the envelope instead of falling back into your safe spot. Sooner or later, it's not going to be safe anymore.
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Sugar Rush - Paradise
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I liked the whimsical feel to the lyrics. I hope you were trying to achieve that! They were really sweet and happy and you did a good job with the task. Well done!
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
I feel every week you're holding back every time… Maybe this challenge was a bit too simple, but you have to attack it like it was your last. Make every song of yours count.
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FattMatt - Still My Love
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Originally posted by Jack Lees
The chorus is very punchy. I like that, it seems in your face and I can imagine a rock beat behind these lyrics. Lots of smart metaphors, which I like to see. Great work!
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
Just because it's a love song doesn't automatically make it a "happy" song. In fact, it feels more like disbelief than infatuation. The feeling of love is a powerful emotion, but because it has been incorporated so many ways, you have to find the correct interpretation to make it seem happy.
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feelslikeadream - I Cant Sleep
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Originally posted by Jack Lees
My fave so far! You did this so well, I felt happy reading your lyrics and coming up a melody to go with them, haha. Really well done, I enjoyed these and one of your best. Please turn this into a song or allow me to, haha! Great work.
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
I feel you were one of the only contestants who got it right on the mark. You kept the happiness flowing without being overly sickening. Great job; just don't let it get too repetitive. There are just so many times we can say "can't stop" before it becomes obnoxious.
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Tymps. - Tandem
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Originally posted by Jack Lees
Cute! I feel like theres parts lacking like the chorus. But I love the bridge and I love the meaning behind the lyrics. I feel like even though they still have your dark tinge, they ooze a sort of happiness and that’s what’s important. Well done.
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
I'm starting to understand this ambiguous nature of yours, but it really overtook the song. Try to dial it back a little; any more and I would've had difficulty understanding what the song was really about. Plus, it didn't feel like the chorus matched with any of the verses, so stay cohesive.
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Scorpio King - Something to Live For
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Originally posted by Jack Lees
I prefer the lyrics in the header than the ones in the hook! The hook is great though. it’s sweet and seems really heart-warming, so I think you did a good job achieving what you were meant to. Great job! Nice job with the vocals again too.
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
This was something I was afraid of; making happy lyrics does not mean abandoning artistry. This is when happy and campy meet, and when something is campy it loses all meaning… You have to find that right balance: make the emotions sing, but don't forget to make them real.
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Girlicious - My Baby (?)
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These aren’t great at all. Compared to last week I wanted to you up your game, but you didn’t well enough. Please, if you’re around next week, work harder. These are weak and I feel like you have a lot of potential to be great.
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
I'm afraid I haven't been able to take your lyrics seriously since the beginning; I apologize for that. "Da-da-da…" only works if we're listening to the actual song, but because these are lyrics, they look incredibly silly. And the repetitiveness of "my baby" got to a point where it was just annoying. Remember, we can't hear what you hear, so you have to make your words count…
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EuphorianSea - Fleeting (Our Sweet Harmony)
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Originally posted by Jack Lees
Reminded me of like a cute, kinda Hollister pop song, with a bouncy vibe to it, I think it’s a good thing. I liked the lyrics too, they were easy to digest. Good job!
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
*Asian girl's voice on "Talk Dirty": "What!? I don't understand!" *cute giggle*.
Not sure what it all meant… it's good, but I'm not feeling the happy… It's more like the bewilderment and confusion. Actually, I think I understand what it means, but if I do, then it DEFINITELY doesn't capture what I wanted from you. It doesn't appeal to the challenge as well as you think it does.
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Lucky#17 - On Top of the World
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Originally posted by Jack Lees
This is one of my faves this week! Last week I wasn’t feeling it, but the simplicity in the chorus works in your favour and that’s good! Great work, the verses seemed fun too, like a love/party vibe. I enjoyed them!
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
I just wanna scream, too… but more on the repetitiveness of it. Happy doesn't mean "be repetitive", because lyrically it looks like a mess. If there ever is a melody challenge, I'm sure this would pass because I'll be able to hear how it sounds, but because of the way it's written it's not selling me.
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EatmeZayn - Sunshine
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Originally posted by Jack Lees
Giving me T. Swizzle teas! I liked it, it was fun to read. Your lyrics are always great and always seem really full and interesting. There’s never any filler lines it seems and they’re really competent. Great job!
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
You were happy, happy, joy, joy up until the bridge, then I imagined the sun blowing up… I think it's okay to add lines like that, but it just seems "what the hell just happened?" when I get there. Other than that, this was a fabulous job! I enjoyed almost every part of it; just don't give up at the end there…
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GotSkill - Stay Awake
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Originally posted by Jack Lees
Don’t be late again, haha! I liked these although, I felt they were a little weak in places and basic in a not too good way. I hope you up your game next week. I know you have it in you to make great lyrics, you don’t always show it.
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
It's like a weird "happy-go-unlucky" song, but I really do like it. You're on your way, but just try to leave out any cliché lines. Something like "You're my Christmas morning" could be construed as lazy, while, on the other hand, something like "For once… I want to stay awake" could be seen as well-positioned and fitting. So, find the balance.
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Member Since: 8/31/2013
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Yay for one positive review  (My song is called "I Can't Sleep" btw.)
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Member Since: 9/15/2012
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I thought it was pretty easy to undertstand 
Thanks judges Nait!
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Member Since: 8/18/2013
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I was happy he/she were still my love 
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Member Since: 9/12/2012
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My judgements are always so different than the others.  i'll have comments next week 
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Member Since: 1/1/2014
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I was gonna change that "lazy" line but I didn't get the chance because I thought it was due today. I literally copied and pasted my rough draft I wrote on Sunday and added 2 lines to the pre chorus in all of 3 minutes before sending it.
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Member Since: 8/31/2013
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Member Since: 5/6/2012
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I'm just praying I'm not in the bottom this time 
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Member Since: 2/18/2012
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My comments are like a sentence this week, I'm sorry guys. 
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Member Since: 1/1/2014
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Finally! I've literally been checking the thread every 5 minutes since Jack posted
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Member Since: 5/6/2012
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Oh my God  My first all-positive comment ever in this game! Thanks so much Jack!
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Member Since: 8/31/2013
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I don't know if it's my phone or ATRL, but I can open comments for every song but mine 
Jack seems nice overall though...
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Member Since: 10/18/2010
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I don't know if it's my phone or ATRL, but I can open comments for every song but mine
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I'm so sorry… the damn apostrophe…  Check your comments now, it's fixed…
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Member Since: 8/31/2013
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I'm so sorry… the damn apostrophe… Check your comments now, it's fixed… |
AAHHHHH thanks, and thanks Jack for the review. It'll be interesting to see where I end up with two positive scores and one negative. Results soon?
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