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Tournament: PLATINUM HIT 8
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Originally posted by Moonchild
 MasqueradeA lullaby plays, our cries pierce the air
Cooing, chatting, celebration, affair
The ball begins and our masks are donned
So starts the dance, its events foregone
Masks for sorrow, masks for pain, masks to hide every shame
No tears, no fears, no strife, no life, no emotion again
A mask for the family, a mask for the friends
Number after number, all laughter and pretense
Music, movement, indulgence, sin
No thoughts, no goals, booze and syringe
Death, escape, as long as you blend
A dancer in green, cut in his prime
A dancer in red, victim of time
A dancer in brown, taken by black
A dancer in white, the final act
A requiem for a dream, silence and a veil
A last dance and a drink for a meaningless tale |
A lot of powerful imagery here! It lowkey reminded me of prom in Pretty Little Liars  . I enjoyed reading this, especially the dancer stanza.
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Originally posted by jpow
So happy with all of my reviews being positive  Some tips to work on but everyone liked the song so I'm happy
Oasis (Interlude)
Walking through the desert completely alone
in the valley of love that I call my own
The shadows of pain appear in my sight
The heat from above is ever so bright
The light turns to night within my own mind
The ease of the heat from inside my chest
How the rain in the desert can change over time
In a lake of despair we find our own kind
The journey to love will always be sought
From those in the dark that need to be taught
That the sand in the desert can never be seen
But can only be felt by those in the heat
Finding you couldn’t have cured this drought
Any quicker than a flood in the desert without
The peace from within seeing you in my sight
The sun finally setting and leaving us for tonight
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I can totally picture a beautiful video to this in my head. It's really poetic, which I personally appreciate but off course, I'm not a judge.
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Originally posted by BlueM
Blue Eyes (Intro)
[Verse]
I’m the breaker of a hundred hearts
I’m the one you wish you never met
I’m the guy who leaves you deeply scarred
I’m the complicated-hearted threat
[Pre-Chorus]
Lying in bed, love is great
Slowly, love turns into hate
When will we just fall apart?
Welcome to my ****ed up heart
[Chorus]
You fell for the monster with charming blue eyes
You don’t see the danger, ‘til deadly, it bites
But take all the kindness, its perfect disguise
And all that remains are the ice cold blue eyes
[Bridge]
But don’t mistaken me to a silly game-maker
Who makes women fall for him, just to break them later
I’m just an eagle, who wants to get free when he’s caged
But wants to go back to his prison after he raged
[Pre-Chorus]
Lying in bed, love is great
Slowly, love turns into hate
When will we just fall apart?
Welcome to my ****ed up heart
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. It's almost sexy in a Cole Turner type of way.
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Originally posted by Golden
What does this all even mean sis
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Nice to see you back
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Originally posted by BlueM
Yeah, you're right. But like in the morning, you can't really react to them properly anymore, as it was announced long ago
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True. Imagine waking up in the morning to find out one was eliminated  . Now that's a **** start to a day.
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Goldmine
(Verse 1)
Standing tall, all alone
Not really sure how I kept strong
One night, you find
The map leading to my mine
(Pre Chorus)
Goldmine at night
Clutch my hair so tight
Holy ground, so save it
I’m a gem and your first kiss
(Chorus)
Goldmine, of fun
I’m on a deadly homerun
Goldmine, of fun
I’m on a deadly homerun
Goldmine, of fun
I’m on a deadly homerun
Goldmine, of fun
I’m on a deadly homerun
(Trap beat instrumental)
(Verse 2)
What will it take, to form me?
Pressure at night around me?
Can you find, my goldmine?
‘Cause I’m a diamond, oh so fine
(Pre Chorus)
Shine through the night
As you clutch my hair so tight
Holy ground, so save it
I’m a gem and your first kiss
(Chorus)
(Trap beat Instrumental)
(Bridge)
I’m on a deadly homerun
Goldmine, of fun
I’m on a deadly homerun
I’m on a deadly homerun
(Trap beat instrumental)
(Chorus)
Here's a song I wrote last week, for my 3rd album 
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The mystery judge's critique was too nice!  thanks so much. I'm glad it reminded you of bells, in my heard the beat was like a march that went along with the chime of a bell
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Originally posted by Buyonce1814
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. It's almost sexy in a Cole Turner type of way.
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Thank you 
Although it was never meant to be sexy
EDIT: It was inspired by Marina and as she is the sexiest human being on earth, it WAS meant to be sexy 
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the first judge didn't like my intro as a song, but thought it was a good poem.
Judge #2 Thought I was ripping off Lana, even though I was going with a more Lorde-ish, abstract writing style 
the next three were sorta positive, albeit a bit more curious with my potential than the actual song i think though.
so i really don't know where i stand
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Is the Mystery judge Remmy
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Originally posted by BlueM
Thank you
Although it was never meant to be sexy
EDIT: It was inspired by Marina and as she is the sexiest human being on earth, it WAS meant to be sexy |
I think the reason it's sexy to me is because I have a thing for dark hurt souls like Blue Eyed guy 
Slay at Marina!
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Originally posted by Buyonce1814
I think the reason it's sexy to me is because I have a thing for dark hurt souls like Blue Eyed guy
Slay at Marina! |
do you have a thing for me? I'm blushing 
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I'm nervous about the mystery judge because the panel is all so good right now. He BETTER be just as qualified as us 
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Originally posted by GotSkill
I'm nervous about the mystery judge because the panel is all so good right now. He BETTER be just as qualified as us |
Inb4 it's a Bloomers-level surprise.
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Monster(Interlude)
Monster
an interlude about love being consumed by drug use
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It was you.. that hurt me
It was you.. that gave into the pressure
It was you.. that was silent
It was you
you let them in and take over you
It was all you
You let.. the monster take over
I couldn't save you
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I couldn't save you
What was I.. supposed to do
You woul-dn't listen to the truth
You let the monster right in
It was you.. that did this
It was you
It was you
It was yoouu...
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Originally posted by BlueM
do you have a thing for me? I'm blushing
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I might be a little old for you. Call me when you're 22+
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When are we getting scores?
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Originally posted by Buyonce1814
I might be a little old for you. Call me when you're 22+
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THAT GIF OH MY GOD! 
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Here's a song I wrote for Karlie Kloss during the CAL season
Phoenix
[Verse 1]
It was a fiery love
Consuming us ‘fore we know what it was
It was all we knew
Through the sun-kissed days, we would prance
Eyes to the skies, on we went
We let it guide us
[Pre-Chorus]
What’s good should remain
(If it hurts, work through the pain)
What’s great shall retain
(We will learn to love again)
[Verse 2]
But as quick as its start, was its demise
It was a chore being together
Those perfect days of past
Filled now with dread
I couldn’t stand it any longer
Two hearts beating together, now split
[Pre-Chorus]
What’s good should remain
(If it hurts, work through the pain)
What’s great shall retain
(We will learn to love again)
[Chorus]
My love has withheld
(It’s true and pure)
Enough for us both
(I made well sure)
Let our love rise up (rise up high)
Like a phoenix from the ashes (let it touch the sky)
[Bridge]
I miss what we had then, baby
(Those were the best days of my life)
We should go back to that place, baby
(Leave this lovelessness, and all strife)
It was once so strong
Once so passionate, fiery almost
Something I’ve yet to forget
Something I shall never, regret
[Chorus]
My love has withheld
(It’s true and pure)
Enough for us both
(I made well sure)
Let our love rise up (rise up high)
Like a phoenix from the ashes (let it touch the sky)
[Chorus- Outro Variation]
Though bathed in fire
(Scorched like desert sand)
Our love will survive
It will soar, and rise higher
Let our love rise up (rise up high)
Like a phoenix from the ashes (let it touch the sky)
Let it touch the sky
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Originally posted by BlueM
THAT GIF OH MY GOD! |
She's so pretty
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Originally posted by Buyonce1814
She's so pretty
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oh my God, I'm in love with her. Seeing her 3 times in the forthcoming 4 months 
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Originally posted by BlueM
oh my God, I'm in love with her. Seeing her 3 times in the forthcoming 4 months |
Have you seen her before? She's amazing. Seeing her again next month.
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Originally posted by BlueM
oh my God, I'm in love with her. Seeing her 3 times in the forthcoming 4 months |
Slay! I can't say I'm a fan as I don't really know her that well but I liked Froot and Happy
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