[Kunst]

Hey! anyone care to give me their opinion on this? I haven't written a song in quite a while (been writing lots of prose tho), and this just came to mind, I just kinda doubt myself at first with songs when they come so out of the blue

/Verse 1/

are we strangers or just stranded lovers?
chasing sweet nothing forevermore
our young hearts, are they ever sober?
drunk kisses poured over motel floors

/pre-chorus 1/

wine ripples in your veins
numb the love to numb the pain

/chorus/

it's every young lover's plight
love, we never get it right
a new bad habit every night
collecting a new lost fight

/Verse 2/

gone by morning, you left me like a regret
what a feeling to know so well
all my bruises burn like my cigarette
now this room feels like a cell

/pre-chorus 2/

the whiskey tides in your soul
made me lose control

/chorus/

it's every young lover's plight
love, we never get it right
a new bad habit every night
collecting a new lost fight

/bridge/

I toss and turn,
they watch me burn,
is this the love I've earned?

/chorus/

it's every young lover's plight
love, we never get it right
a new bad habit every night
collecting a new lost fight

/bridge/

I toss and turn,
they watch me burn,
is this the love I've earned?

[Kunst]

Originally posted by Alexandra burke

Can someone help me write a song!

Wait. I've been looking for someone to co-write something for a while

[ceremonials]

Originally posted by Alexandra burke

Can someone help me write a song!

I can.

One month gays!

[ceremonials]

Originally posted by Kunst

Hey! anyone care to give me their opinion on this? I haven't written a song in quite a while (been writing lots of prose tho), and this just came to mind, I just kinda doubt myself at first with songs when they come so out of the blue

/Verse 1/

are we strangers or just stranded lovers?
chasing sweet nothing forevermore
our young hearts, are they ever sober?
drunk kisses poured over motel floors

/pre-chorus 1/

wine ripples in your veins
numb the love to numb the pain

/chorus/

it's every young lover's plight
love, we never get it right
a new bad habit every night
collecting a new lost fight

/Verse 2/

gone by morning, you left me like a regret
what a feeling to know so well
all my bruises burn like my cigarette
now this room feels like a cell

/pre-chorus 2/

the whiskey tides in your soul
made me lose control

/chorus/

it's every young lover's plight
love, we never get it right
a new bad habit every night
collecting a new lost fight

/bridge/

I toss and turn,
they watch me burn,
is this the love I earned?

/chorus/

it's every young lover's plight
love, we never get it right
a new bad habit every night
collecting a new lost fight

/bridge/

I toss and turn,
they watch me burn,
is this the love I earned?

You better Stan for Sweet Nothing.

To me, it feels kinda short and fragmented. The first verse is REALLY good but the rest feels kinda choppy and incomplete.

Meter and rhyme seems OK.

Imagery is pretty good, especially in first verse.

Overall it's pretty good Are you joining PH?

[Kunst]

Originally posted by ceremonials

You better Stan for Sweet Nothing.

To me, it feels kinda short and fragmented. The first verse is REALLY good but the rest feels kinda choppy and incomplete.

Meter and rhyme seems OK.

Imagery is pretty good, especially in first verse.

Overall it's pretty good Are you joining PH?

Queen Florence is an endless fountain of inspiration

Thanks for the feedback! that's what I felt, like it came to me so fast, that I feel the very first words (the first verse) sounds overall like the strongest bit, and the rest kinda threads through, but it's not so tightly knitted. I guess I'll keep on working on this one for a bit

Yes! I had to quit the last season of PH due to a one-of-a-kind offer to write and produce someone's EP in Brooklyn, but I'm planning on making a comeback for this next season

[ceremonials]

BITCH

[Kunst]

I actually gave the singer my song from the Twitter challenge

[ceremonials]

Wasn't that two seasons ago though?

Either way, it was SO hard

[Kunst]

Originally posted by ceremonials

Wasn't that two seasons ago though?

Either way, it was SO hard

No no, there was a Twitter Challenge on season 9 too. I remember writing like about 5 different topics and every time I exceeded the word limit, until I finally made a "I'm badder than a bad boy" song that I could put together in such few words

[ceremonials]

Hmmm I don't remember that all but I was out by Round 5

1 - Intros
2 - Duets
3 - Pokemon
4 - Sequels

I don't remember what R5 was but i got eliminated that round.

[Jackson]

I have creative ebbs and flows but they rarely coincide with PH. S5 was a huge creative peak for me but that's about it. I write more in the off months

[Kunst]

Originally posted by ceremonials

Hmmm I don't remember that all but I was out by Round 5

1 - Intros
2 - Duets
3 - Pokemon
4 - Sequels

I don't remember what R5 was but i got eliminated that round.

Wait. it's TRUE I just checked and I was gone for season 9, that was season 8

[Jackson]

It's true. Unfortunately the twitter round, aka the best PH challenge, was absent from 9xPH. Hopefully it makes a return in Diamond Hit

[Kunst]

It really is a challenge, so I agree with u ^

[keshaspearsxo]

Originally posted by Jackson

It's true. Unfortunately the twitter round, aka the best PH challenge, was absent from 9xPH. Hopefully it makes a return in Diamond Hit

Hahaha!

[ceremonials]

I've been writing a lot lately. Am READY for this season

[SaintWest]

New to this thread. Can somebody explain to me how this works?

[Nait Phoenix]

Originally posted by SaintWest

New to this thread. Can somebody explain to me how this works?

The songwriters' thread is literally just a thread where fellow songwriter's interact with one another and share thoughts, processes, and partial or full excerpts of their work! Feel free to post your questions, queries, and statements about the songwriting process or what you're dealing with as a songwriter, and we'll be open to discussions on anything! Glad to have you on-board!

[Temporal]

Originally posted by ceremonials

Hmmm I don't remember that all but I was out by Round 5

1 - Intros
2 - Duets
3 - Pokemon
4 - Sequels

I don't remember what R5 was but i got eliminated that round.

This is correct, the greatest 4 opening challenges in PH history

[St. Charles]

When is this mess starting? It's about time I show y'all the PROPER way to flop.