I ain't got no type, (nah)
Bad bitches is the only thing that I like, (woo)
You ain't got no life, (nah)
Cups with the ice and we do this every night, (hey)
I ain't check the price, (I got it)
I make my own money, so I spend it how I like, (woo)
I'm just living life, (hey, hey)
And let my momma tell it, *****, I ain't living right, (yup)
Devil’s Grin (BlueM): I think you did a really good job at writing for this style of music, you really went in. You’ve got some really cool imagery and stuff here. I can’t really picture it being a single for Color Therapy but it could be a cool album track. My only concern is that the chorus doesn’t really feel like a chorus. While the verses typically have the information and the chorus sort of sums it up, the chorus could still have a little more meat on its bones. It doesn’t really feel too hooky, and even indie/alternative music wants hooks.
Freak (ClarksonSlays): So yes I know that you’re afraid about submitting this song to my label because apparently I’m your biggest critic? There was a lot of confusion evidently from the thread about what “indie/alternative” meant, and I guess people weren’t really checking for the examples so I didn’t know. Therefore, I feel bad making this my biggest criticism but this doesn’t feel like an indie/alternative song. It feels like death metal. Although it might not have been crystal clear, I tried to indicate that Color Therapy wanted the cool and not the “I’m going to break into your house and mürder your family”. Nevertheless, I do think this is pretty good work. The chorus is hooky and you have some cool imagery. I really enjoyed the bridge and you sort of got tangential and explored the meaning of the cliché saying “Beauty is in the eye of the beholder”. In the future (and you can reject this if you disagree) I want to see more moments from you like that bridge.
Reptile (inuborg): Well damn. That’s how you do a first line. First lines are really important because that’s the first impression for a listener and that is a great example of how you pull one off well. While this is far too enigmatic to be a single for Color Therapy, I could picture this being a fan favorite. Meter and rhyme scheme are very clear and there’s some awesome imagery I wish I came up with myself. Better yet, it really feels like it fits the style and the sound that I requested. I honestly wish I wrote this, it perfectly encapsulates someone going ******* crazy. Great work here.
Unravel (conatus): This definitely feels like a single. I think there’s a certain catchiness you can’t shake from your lyrics if you tried, but of course you don’t need to. I don’t really feel like this song felt honest. I hate giving criticisms like this because there’s no exact way to pinpoint and solve the problem but… it felt very calculated. This feeling was especially prevalent in the prechorus, which also was having problems in terms of substance and making sure every line is valuable and worth keeping in. This feeling was the least prevalent in the verses, where detail and metaphor was matched with meaning and feeling. Next week I might suggest you try to write something about yourself and your life if you’re having troubles getting the emotion in there. This was not your best work but it was not bad either! Please don’t have a million meltdowns about how you’re “going to be eliminated” because I don’t feel like reading it.
"Overall this was not the best work I’ve seen from you, I know you can do better! "
. Tymps having faith in me to do better? OMG.
In terms of the side-line chick line... She's basically calling the sideline ho trash whilst saying his rags are in the trash. Wait...I can't explain it properly .
Unravel (conatus): This definitely feels like a single. I think there’s a certain catchiness you can’t shake from your lyrics if you tried, but of course you don’t need to. I don’t really feel like this song felt honest. I hate giving criticisms like this because there’s no exact way to pinpoint and solve the problem but… it felt very calculated. This feeling was especially prevalent in the prechorus, which also was having problems in terms of substance and making sure every line is valuable and worth keeping in. This feeling was the least prevalent in the verses, where detail and metaphor was matched with meaning and feeling. Next week I might suggest you try to write something about yourself and your life if you’re having troubles getting the emotion in there. This was not your best work but it was not bad either! Please don’t have a million meltdowns about how you’re “going to be eliminated” because I don’t feel like reading it.
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O wale.
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