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Discussion: ATRL Songwriter's Thread | Jacktrus gain dual #1
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Some of you are really talented 
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Originally posted by GotSkill
Just a wrote a super cool slow love/sex song called After Hours  It's definitely my favorite song I've written in a few months at least. The only thing I want to do now is lower it a few half steps so I can sing it more gently and soft and it will be amazing. I could see it being a duet as well. It was inspired by Pillowtalk which is weird because I don't even like that song that much but I liked the vibes in it.
Some lyrics
Late nights, your place
Won't leave this dreamscape
I won't close my eyes
Soft touch, slow kiss
Wanna live like this
Forever and for life
New nights, old home
Drown out the echoes
Of old flames gone away
Lately you've been
All I can breathe in
This feeling I can't escape
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I really like the style of your writing  amazing
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Member Since: 3/2/2014
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Here goes one of my songs
Your Sun
Morning comes today again
But there is no light in the sky
And we keep on living
Like ghosts who can´t find paradise
And no matter what we do
At the end there is always night
But we keep on living
Even if we´re bound to say goodbye
Souls in cities
Loveless hearts
The endless journey
One mile apart
We keep on dreaming
Of what´s to come
But Now is leaving
Without a sound
When winter ends
I will let the waves take me to that land
I will swim and find a place to die
By your side, by your side
And your rays of light
Will heal every scar that cold left once
I will let my snow melt
Under your sun, your sun
Evening is coming today too
We were never asked to choose
Is it never ending?
Is twilight a part of you?
And no matter how we try
Monsters haunt us every night
In a corner of my mind
I wonder if there is a way out
The cementery
Peaceful days
Night can´t haunt
What is beyond the grave
I keep on dreaming
Of a future with you
Will you be waiting,
On the other side too?
Somewhere beyond storms and clouds
Beyond the smoke and noise of the town
There is a place that some call “paradise”
And when I get there, when I arrive
I will embrace the joy of your light
I will dream forever under your sun
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Finished album 4. I feel my 3rd was my magnum opus but I've already started planning my 5th album and picking the songs I'll write over. My 1989 is upon us 
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Originally posted by Alexandra burke
I really like the style of your writing amazing |
Thank you 
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Originally posted by KeshasFansRose
Second album metacritic:
*loses at the Grammys with ‘Strange love feels good’ and plays the gay card via twitter*
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@Azealiabanks: 1. riot 2. queen of clubs 3. big talk 4. skylar diggins 5. the big big beat 6. Used to being alone. 7. (still inprogress) 8. along the coast
I see you Azealia, checking this thread?
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I've organized my songs in two albums and two EPs. The first two albums are indie pop/dreampop, the first EP is pop/punk and the second one is pop/R&B
Winter:
1. morning rain, rainy mind
2. Autumn
3. Bring Me Back My Youth
4. Mountain
5. HOME
6. Three Summers
7. Winter Bones
8. My Old Town
9. About Not Dying Unwanted
10. The Road
Ma Boheme
1. Imbolc/Signs of Spring
2. Out Of The Blue
3. Ma Boheme
4. Garden of Evil
5. Black Religion
6. Greatest Dreams
7. The Rope
8. Motherhood
9. Your Sun
10. Visions of Light
REPUBLIC
1. Overhuman~The Master Race~
2. Golden Throne
3. Still Life Moving Fast
4. God Is A Machine
MILLENIAL
1. Reversed 21st Century Love
2. Hiding The Cigarrettes
3. Our Christmas Time
4. Disneyland For Broken Souls
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So I actually haven't posted anything in here, which is odd seeing as this is my thread and all...so lemme do that now! I wanted to write a song inspired by sleep paralysis for a while now. I've never experienced it myself (or at least to the scary degree that some people have), so I decided to watch a documentary about sleep paralysis for some inspiration. This song is what came of it.
 ParalysisEvery night I lie paralyzed
These visions they leave me so petrified
Vibrations they echo across the room
Sensations they warn me "They're coming for you"
Closer and closer they draw in near
Shadows are lurking I wake in fear
Static electric across my skin
They haunt me, they taunt me again and again
Every night I lie terrified
These demons they've plagued me for all of my life
Profusely I struggle to muster a sound
It's useless they beckon and hammer me down
Closer and closer they draw in near
Shadows are lurking I wake in fear
Static electric across my skin
They haunt me, they taunt me again and again
There's screaming and crying inside of my head
There's eyes in each corner they're raging and red
Closer and closer they all want me dead
They reach out and choke me til I'm out of breath
And no one believes me
I'm told that it's just a dream
But no one can hear me
When I'm crying and try to scream
There's screaming and crying inside of my head
There's eyes in each corner they're raging and red
Closer and closer they all want me dead
They reach out and choke me til I'm out of breath
Every night I lie paralyzed
These visions they leave me so petrified
Vibrations they echo across the room
Sensations they warn me "We're coming for you"
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Heartfaker you got the best of me
But I just keep on coming back incessantly
Oh why
Did you have to run your game on me?
I should've known right from the start
You'd go and fake my heart
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Member Since: 1/1/2014
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Quote:
I, I've been lonely
And I, I've been blind
And I,. I've learned nothing
So my hands are firmly tied
To the sinking leadweight
of failure
I've worked hard all my life
Money slips through my hands
My face in the mirror tells me
It's no surprise that I'm
Pushing the stone up the hill
of failure
They tempt me with violence
They punish me with ideals
And they crush me with an image of my
life that's nothing but unreal
Except on the goddamned slaveship
of failure
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When I get my hands on some money
I'll kiss it's green skin
And I'll ask it's dirty face
"Where the hell have you been?"
"I am the fuel that fires the engine
of failure."
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I saw my father crying
I saw my mother break her hand
On a wall that wouldn't weep
But that certainly held in
The mechanical moans of a dying man
Who was a failure
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bitch, slay me 
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Written four years ago
former times:
desperate covers working wonders
everyone knows it shows under
smoldered studders thrust asunder
Haphazard in calling thunder
Didn't skip the talk about
former times without a doubt
Trust in me I'll go that route
to the only one devout
Their tradition always returns
Memories that give nothing to learn
surfacing now I can't discern
shades regardless it all won't burn
Didn't skip the talk about
former times without a doubt
trust in me I'll go that route
to the only one devout
Spitelessly respawning
Nothing else but wanting
spitelessly respawning
nothing else but wanting
chorus
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Originally posted by Hugamari
So I actually haven't posted anything in here, which is odd seeing as this is my thread and all...so lemme do that now! I wanted to write a song inspired by sleep paralysis for a while now. I've never experienced it myself (or at least to the scary degree that some people have), so I decided to watch a documentary about sleep paralysis for some inspiration. This song is what came of it.
Paralysis
Every night I lie paralyzed
These visions they leave me so petrified
Vibrations they echo across the room
Sensations they warn me "They're coming for you"
Closer and closer they draw in near
Shadows are lurking I wake in fear
Static electric across my skin
They haunt me, they taunt me again and again
Every night I lie terrified
These demons they've plagued me for all of my life
Profusely I struggle to muster a sound
It's useless they beckon and hammer me down
Closer and closer they draw in near
Shadows are lurking I wake in fear
Static electric across my skin
They haunt me, they taunt me again and again
There's screaming and crying inside of my head
There's eyes in each corner they're raging and red
Closer and closer they all want me dead
They reach out and choke me til I'm out of breath
And no one believes me
I'm told that it's just a dream
But no one can hear me
When I'm crying and try to scream
There's screaming and crying inside of my head
There's eyes in each corner they're raging and red
Closer and closer they all want me dead
They reach out and choke me til I'm out of breath
Every night I lie paralyzed
These visions they leave me so petrified
Vibrations they echo across the room
Sensations they warn me "We're coming for you" |
This is a bit try hard, but A for effort!
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Originally posted by A Bomb
This is a bit try hard, but A for effort! |
Wow Citrus, thank you. 
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Who are they to say love is a word they've defined? / That affection will have ran its course in due time / Then it turns into something they can't recognize / You and I~
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new song i'm working on called "my vagina"
my vagina gets wetter than hers
my vagina tastes better than hers
i've recently gotten a gig as a ghostwriter for cupcakke, hopefully she likes it!
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Quote:
Originally posted by Lynx
new song i'm working on called "my vagina"
my vagina gets wetter than hers
my vagina tastes better than hers
i've recently gotten a gig as a ghostwriter for cupcakke, hopefully she likes it!
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omg i cried reading this
so emotional!
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ATRL Contributor
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Originally posted by Tylerbv
omg i cried reading this
so emotional!
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Thank you.  It took me three weeks to finalise that lyric but I'm really happy with it.
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Yellow Brick Road - Written about a place I used to live.
Taking a walk down this old track,
Where I used to dream of the life I wanted
But much like my dreams, it's been torn apart
And now feels desolate and haunted
I used to avert my eyes
At all those warning signs.
Looking back, I know now
I did that one too many times.
But I can fix this. I can fix this.
I can see the ghosts moving through the branches of the trees
I'm back in a place, where nothing is ever as it seems
I know that all of this is solely in my mind
But I had to return, if I'm to leave it all behind
I used to avert my eyes
At all those warning signs.
Looking back, I know now
I did that one too many times.
I see it now. I see it now.
I see the bridge, and it's since been stained with tears
From all the people who have passed over the years
The birds below are nothing but skin and bone
Spirits surround me but yet I still feel alone.
I used to avert my eyes
At all those warning signs.
Looking back, I know now
I did that one too many times.
One too many times.
Now, the river keeps on rising, it's marking my demise
And the ripples on the water, make me tremble inside.
I wonder if these shadows, can hear my muffled cries.
Because I've since realised, that I won't make it out alive.
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Originally posted by Lynx
Thank you. It took me three weeks to finalise that lyric but I'm really happy with it. |
i can tell!  i feel your pain
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Today I was determined to write a song but it just isn't happening so far. I have the PERFECT title and concept and I have some sets of chords, but it just isn't coming together yet. I still have faith. It's been almost a month since I wrote a really good song so I can feel this one coming and it feels big. Just needs a little extra inspiration/a hook or two
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