Around The Fire (dwuw) : I liked it! It wasn't as good as Crystalline, but I liked it. The topic was clear, your imagery was good However, there are a few things I should point out. 1) glass and war don't rhyme and I really needed a rhyme there to complete that section, 2) the theme of freedom was prominent in the chorus and the pre-chorus, but not so much in the verses. You should have only spent 2-3 lines to describe the feeling you had before being set free, not both of the verses. But it was overall less bad than you seem to think it was
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