Woo this is gonna be good practice for when I'm actually reviewing songs in a month or so.
These are just simple comments, not critiques, but if you want anything more let me know!
ughgabriel - Thick WallsI do really like this one and I feel like it started out strong. I could relate to so much of it actually. My advice would be to try writing to a structure some time. Your last song and this one both don't have any clear repetitions; things are repeated but there isn't a clear chorus as lines are always changed. This can work too, but sometimes a solid chorus can help bring everything together, and I think this song in particular could benefit from that.
ceremonials - The Man With The Anchor
Love the first four lines. I've played with this imagery in the past and I really like it, so I'm a bit biased when it comes to the general metaphor. The next four lines aren't necessary in my opinion and the repeating of the "drown" and "down" rhymes used in the first four lines do detract a bit. The rest of it is really, really great though. I love the sense of movement this chorus provides.
EpicSongFan - Fragile
Minor note, thank you for using the more unpredictable "gaze"/"maze" rhyme rather than the cliche and predictable "haze"/"daze". In general though, the verse is bordering on the predictable side and there are some problems ("all you did was apologized" doesn't sound right). Second verse is much stronger. The chorus is simple which is nice, but I think it could be bigger, if only for the second and final chorus. I like the bridge too. A well put-together song.
EpicSongFan - Nightfall
Already this song is better than the last, not as much cliche/predictable language. My only main problem from the first half is the use of "break free" in both the verse and pre-chorus. When writing for PH don't include annotations like (Instrumental), by the way. I love this chorus though, fantastic work.
EpicSongFan - Denial
This was almost going to get a "No flaws." comment from me until I reached the hook. I get what you're going for, but eh, I'm still against "Ooh, ooh, oohs" in songs. Technically, they're not lyrics. I get that they make catchy songs catchy, but they drag down lyrically impressive songs. I hope that makes sense. Otherwise it's honestly perfect for me.
EpicSongFan - Reverberate & The Recovery
This is nice. I've already commented on the Ooh's and the (Instrumental)'s, that still stands. There was a bit of a problem with the first verse (these should be this). The rest of it is good though.
EpicSongFan - Hope
Love the meaning of the song. There are some problems though, like "robbed away from it". There's the ooh's and instrumental's again. But you avoided some more obvious rhymes which I liked ("dust/trust" rather than "rust"). Not your strongest song out of this batch but I still enjoyed it!
Roberto - Green Eyes
This is a really lovely song. It's obviously personal to you so I can't actually critique on any of the details. A tip would be to try to use more metaphors instead of just saying exactly how you feel... compare your feelings to something else. I like the "poem/masterpiece" lyric a lot, that was a standout for me.
KeshasFansRose - Hurt You More Than You Think
I can definitely see the Halsey/Colors influence in the lyrics and the way that they've been structured. Particularly in the chorus. I think this is a good starting point, I've done the same thing, written with a certain pre-existing melody in mind. But definitely try to work on writing independently without the aid of a pre-existing melody. We don't want another Without You/Wildest Dreams on our hands.
KeshasFansRose - I Hope You Go
The theme is strong even if not entirely original. I do prefer this to your first song because the Halsey influence isn't so prominent. Ignoring the stuttered bits which I've already said I'd prefer it if lyrics were just written without melody in mind, it's a nice song. The verses are the highlights. The bridge too.
KeshasFansRose - Last Summer
I'm honestly not sure what to think of this one. It's not the best song lyrically and I think you know that. The stutter bits are just too much to ignore for me. I don't necessarily think it's the best party song I've ever read. There aren't many good rhymes here. Sorry.
I'll post more comments in another batch.
It's nice seeing this place booming.
