Quote:
Originally posted by moijejoue
No pillar strong enough for the two of us
One must make it out alive
Which gladiator will bite the dust?
Who's brave enough to take the dive?
Just face it, we're too stubborn
Decomposing into rubble
What must we call home
When hearts collapses like Rome
Yay or nay?
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I actually really like this.
The only thing I'd point out is the second line. "must" doesn't feel right, cause you both
want to make it out alive. It's the purpose / desired outcome, not an obligation. But I get that the appropriate phrase ("only one can make it out alive") would mess up your meter and potentially your stressing. I assume "collapse
s" is a typo though
