Also, the whole first verse is so dramatic if it’s just about dancing at a club. I felt like someone just broke your heart or something. (EDIT: Just saw someone DID break your heart and now you’re dancing in a club to forget about it.)
This review serving a me tea when I wrote reviews while reading the songs. My impact >
Going back to the chorus again, “obscene” seems more there because it rhymed with “serene” than because that’s the word you wanted to use. “throne”/”zone” is another example of this
The way you read me so effortlessly but thank you! I guess I still need to work on how wordy I can be but it was definitely better than my last entry at least. I definitely did force rhymes here and there; maybe because I was pressuring myself to make a good rhyme scheme after my last entry? But it led to some awkward lines so I need to stop trying to force myself to fit a rhyme if it sounds off. I'm glad you liked my concept tho!
Huga has never really full in stanned for a song of mine so I guess it's understandable. I suppose I still probably got a good score. Pull thru other judges
I'll review B1 tonight, should be out in a few hours, getting ahead of my Best Of graphics first.
but thank you! I guess I still need to work on how wordy I can be but it was definitely better than my last entry at least. I definitely did force rhymes here and there; maybe because I was pressuring myself to make a good rhyme scheme after my last entry? But it led to some awkward lines so I need to stop trying to force myself to fit a rhyme if it sounds off. I'm glad you liked my concept tho! 
