Tournament: 💎 DIAMOND HIT 💎 - Page 228

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Hugamari and Vulnicura suck.

Jackson

OK the second half of Miranda's album was 10x better than the first. Listening to Brandy Clark's now. Its' alright but not in love with it

Gladion

Temporal - Mixed leaning positive
Hugamari - Positive
Cupid - Negative

Pears better pull through

Vulnicura

Temp - Positive
Hug - Mixed
Cupid - Negative

whew

Temporal

I can make some overall hints while we wait for PrePears to finish I suppose.

MattyTacos

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Originally posted by Temporal

I can make some overall hints while we wait for PrePears to finish I suppose.

Give me a hint, father

Temporal

I'm mostly doing this because you FLOPS still can't TELL when I like your SONGS or NOT

keshaspearsxo

Pears Batch #2

More lacklustre entries

Beatinglikeadrum - Always With Me:
Overall this was quite vague and the rhythm was a bit nonexistent. I think this entry should've had some more depth to the relationship you were writing about because this doesn't really draw me in at all. This entry does make me feel like you have the ideas there though, the imagery is there and whatnot, you just need a little improvement - but this is round 1, so there is nothing to hold against you.

Pecinta Mariah - Syllables:
Honestly this whole thing is rather cringey. If theres one thing I despise, it's writing about songs within songs. The random unknown words at the end, the attempts at rhymes, the song references - it's all quite bad.

conatus - In the Night:
Obviously not much of a magnum opus, but it doesn't really need to be. Everything is simplistic, but done right. I guess this is what authentic minimalism is. The verse parts were quite good and I felt like they set a mood that would've been nice for a longer song, but with this being restrictive in terms of length it doesn't really go all the way, but it's understandable why. The meter was great and I actually liked the use of easy rhymes, it didn't feel pretentious (which is odd for you).

funnellegs - Where Did They Go?:
I feel like parts of this were fine, but I think most of all this song could've used a bit more context. It would've actually been nice to have the title question answered, or it even kinda explained why the love dissipated. The second verse as a whole is pretty bleh, I would completely get rid of that and give more backing to the story or something instead because it didn't add anything to the song. It also could've used a tighter meter because some parts seemed overly wordy.

Corsola - No More Crying:
Yeah, this is really overly wordy, I see what you mean now. Lyrically and conceptually you were very strong but the more technical things like the structure of this were kinda inexistent, but that is something that can be learned, especially with this only being your first entry it's not something that is a huge problem because you can improve on it in the future - you already have the ideas and the eloquence to write, but if you get a bit of help from us regarding fine tuning it into a more songlike form, I don't see why you can't go far in this game.

Ventitonic - Shuffle (Interlude):
You get a 1 for the mariah picture. Um feel free to try making a comeback in the next round.

ughgabriel - Despair:
In regards to this, I think you did a good job, but it was quite a big task to go in with a theme like that on a song that is so short. It probably would've been more suited to a full length song, as to just generally set more of a tone, give more context and backstory and what not, but this isn't a bad attempt at all either. One of the things that pointed out to me the most was your rhymes - I would say in the future try to change up the rhyme scheme a little rather than the mostly AAAA scheme here because at a point it starts to feel less and less natural.

RihsusChrist(ATG) - Monster Unseen:
I can't believe you wrote a song about Hugamari! Please work on giving a tight meter in the future because rhythm wise this has moments that don't work, but lyrically you did quite well for an early round. I'm intrigued.

Aurora - Snowflake Secrets:
Does it even SNOW IN AUSTRALIA???? Giving you a 1. You craft a really nice atmosphere with the imagery, it's used very nicely throughout the song. A minor point - don't use a word like 'unequivocally' again, only Mariah can get away with messes like that. As far as the story goes, it feels at points kind of like an after thought or a lesser part of the song - the part which is most notable is the imagery, the story generally comes second, but I see the references throughout and it makes sense, but if you're aiming moreso to tell a very clear story in the future I'd say bring that idea more to the forefront in your lyrics in replacement of some lines centred around setting an image.

SaintWest

For anybody who wants to see my round one entry that Temporal called "decent", and Peaches claimed "can't totally be torn through the mud" (it can), see below!:

Bulletproof

PhreshDiamond

Temporal - Mixed
Huga - Mixed towards positive
Cupid - Scathing
Pears - Mixed towards negative

Just hoping to survive till R2

MattyTacos

Bulletproof was good but if you ever use "vulnerable veins" in a song again ill shoot u

the 2nd verse tho, i was slayed tbh

Gladion

I kinda hope phresh is safe for the kii's

PhreshDiamond

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Originally posted by Gladion

I kinda hope phresh is safe for the kii's

I'll help back your bags if you get punched out tbh.

Gladion

Vulnerable Veins gives me Ocean Lips tease

ceremonials

do we know how many ppl are leaving?

keshaspearsxo

Okay last batch now, then I will compile results and let the show truly begin

keshaspearsxo

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Originally posted by ceremonials

do we know how many ppl are leaving?

You do not.

PhreshDiamond

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Originally posted by ceremonials

do we know how many ppl are leaving?

At least half hopefully, to speed the judging up.

ceremonials

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Originally posted by keshaspearsxo

You do not.

hopefully not more than 5

swiftie13

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Originally posted by SaintWest

For anybody who wants to see my round one entry that Temporal called "decent", and Peaches claimed "can't totally be torn through the mud" (it can), see below!:

Bulletproof

Send this to Sia and watch it smash