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Tournament: PLATINUM HIT 9
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Hugamari - Theodore
This concept is one of the best this round. Everything about this was just quite consistently good - lyrically it was strong, conceptually it was interesting and different, and still kept a level of being open to interpretation, it was all quite well done. The meter is all well, and you also had some moments of really nice language usage. All together, it was just a solid entry I believe.
Huga, in general you've been one of the most consistent here from what I've seen. Your concepts have been brilliant and diverse, you've given me emotion, you've creeped me out and you've intrigued me. You always do an amazing job of truly creating a world within a song and paint a detailed picture mentally without reliance on typical imagery. You always give in some of the most polished entries - you very rarely have issues such as meter, which demonstrates how well experienced you are. Your writing has been refreshing to me, and you've definitely shown off your skill and proven your status. Wishing you the best of luck!
Citrus - Bathtub Castaway
Conceptually, I got the suicide story. This narrative and the water imagery were quite less adventurous for this round than I had expected and hoped for. On the other hand, lyrically this is probably the best I've seen from you thus far. While it isn't as emotional as your last entries, this entry was very polished in the lyrical aspect - it lacked any of the odd lines that you've had in the past. I said last round that I was over storytelling songs, and luckily here I think you found a nice middle ground between just being a narrator and actually coming thru with some lyricism, which is great to see.
Citrus, you've been one of the most interesting contestants from what I've seen! Your exploration of completely differing styles of songwriting styles shows your diversity and potential. You're a really great writer in that aspect. While I wasn't really into some, you've still really impressed me. As you continue to write, I'm sure you'll explore even more areas and ideas and potentially find a very strong middle ground - without the story overshadowing the lyricism, or without the irreverence being overbearing. Even when your entries are a bit messy, you always have a story/concept and a vision that is quite well planned out. There's a lack of parts in your songs that are kind of purposeless, which is really great. I never know what to expect from you - and that's what I love. Keep me on my seat, keep me guessing, keep me wanting to see more - I do. Best of luck from here on out.
TheCheetahwings - Eclipse
I can see that you pushed yourself a little here, and I kind of like that it's pretty open to interpretation. This is also kind of your downfall though, while it's open to interpretation - it's a bit TOO much, a bit too vague. Two of my ideas about what you were talking about were falling in love with an alien, and a homosexual relationship. So really, I'm not quite sure. In that sense though, your song was pretty fitting to the challenge, but not really excellently executed. On the positive side, your sweet lyricism shines through again even though you've pushed yourself to go further conceptually, which is great to see.
Cheetah, your entries have always been fun for me to read. You really excel at creating catchy and appealing songs - in fact, during my time I don't think I've ever seen you really fail or highly disappoint me in a song, you've been consistent in your delivery and your light style shines throughout your entries. You've proven yourself to be a great writer, and upon continuing to push yourself you'll certainly become even better. Good luck with this!
CountryBritney - Panic of the Runway
Undeniably strong conceptually - this is something totally different and something I couldn't have anticipated. You captured the challenge aim really well. You created such a unique character and concept yet the lyricism is still strong, and I love how it isn't just typical writing style, you really embodied the character quite well which makes for a strong entry. The pretty couplet is among my favourite lyrics of all I've seen. I don't think it was perfect but with a challenge like this I wasn't particularly expecting perfectionism.
CB, I've loved getting to see your entries. It is clear that writing is certainly a passion for you, and it's been awesome to be a part of that. What I love about your writing is I always find it very ambitious. If anybody is the #Enigma of this season - I'd designate it as you, because I'm always surprised and never particularly know what to expect from you. Your style is just great and always feels very introspective and thoughtful, something I love in writing which craves me to want to see even more. Among the remaining contestants, you're one of the ones I know least about - but you've always been a joy in the thread and I hope your PH journey continues after this season. Despite being the only remaining new player, you've certainly held your own. The best of luck to you!
feelslikeadream - Enigma Undercover
Mmmm well. Conceptually, you went there. Totally weird, totally undone. Though, not particularly impressive. I don't doubt that this is not your lyrical peak. Obviously, your writing skill is there, but I struggle to get behind the concept. Other than it's weird factor, it falls flat for me. It's a little interesting for it's quirkiness, but not completely compelling to me. I do think, though, that you had some witty/well thought out lines that had a nice effect - but still, not really the best. I assume you kind of struggled here, which is a shame. Also a shame - I do know what cruising is.
It's been great to FINALLY see you from the other side of the panel. Finally getting to see your songs, it's evident why you've done so well in the past and why you've earned a lot of respect from everybody. Your writing skill is often faultless, but I think conceptually you could be a little stronger at times. Though, this is only from what I've seen at this point - and it remains true that it's been really fun with you taking part. I absolutely wish you good luck feef!
Moonchild - Heartbeat Song
Honestly, this is probably the best song I've seen from you in my time judging. But it really just isn't meant for this round. Wrong time and wrong round, really, it just doesn't match the description for me. The positive side is that I think this is your best lyricism for me thus far. I love how you kinda of took the carefree vibe from the last song and made a new one that was stronger lyrically to kind of slap me in the face. I love slapping. That aside, it was just a really fun entry for me and I totally enjoyed reading it - a highlight for me weirdly was the thump thump. I see it as really a really cute upbeat track, it has a little quirkiness but isn't totally the weirdness/uniqueness called for. A great song but not the week for it!
Moonchild, your entries have been really interesting to me. Of everybody, when I think back now, I can recall the most entries from you just off my memory. That's because you've kind of shown a lot of diversity - a summer bop, a dirty Amy track, an interstellar enigma and this. I like that you've tried a lot of different styles, but I still don't feel like I have a complete understanding of your style. In the future, I think you'll definitely find one and it'll be great to see perfected - I know you're still relatively new to writing and PH in comparison to other contestants but you've really done great in your own right (again) and I hope you've enjoyed this! Sending you the best of luck xo.
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I don't want this to end, I'm having so much fun 
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Are y'all watching Stranger Things?
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Girl you needed to be meaner so we could've predicted scores better. Call me fat
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Are y'all watching Stranger Things?
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On episode 3, I'm living
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Girl you needed to be meaner so we could've predicted scores better. Call me fat
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ClarksonSlays said no hints!
Suffer
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And pears' reviews confirm my theory re: ignoring the challenge and just writing a good song with a kind of standard theme  Too bad this isn't like last season (or whenever) when everyone got 2 scores, one for song and one for challenge 
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On episode 3, I'm living
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OMG, I just finished ep. 3 a minute ago and it prompted my question. I loved ep 3 
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TheCheetahWings – Eclipse
This really wasn’t unfamiliar to me as far as Platinum Hit entries go, or even for a TheCheetahWings song. It wasn’t “weird” enough to be called weird or catch my interest. There was a lot of nonsensical imagery in general. I liked the chorus but the verses weren’t really strong enough to support it. I would have loved to see something more “out there” conceptually and some more interesting language beyond your typical descriptive imagery. The song could have benefitted from a stronger storyline and more shocking imagery as a whole. Really this just read as pretty average overall.
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I definitely get the criticisms  It was difficult to really tell if something was "too weird" or "too normal" so I think I ended up playing it a bit safe, though I'm happy with the song on it's own I definitely see why some judges may think it wasn't nearly out there enough
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TheCheetahwings - Eclipse
I can see that you pushed yourself a little here, and I kind of like that it's pretty open to interpretation. This is also kind of your downfall though, while it's open to interpretation - it's a bit TOO much, a bit too vague. Two of my ideas about what you were talking about were falling in love with an alien, and a homosexual relationship. So really, I'm not quite sure. In that sense though, your song was pretty fitting to the challenge, but not really excellently executed. On the positive side, your sweet lyricism shines through again even though you've pushed yourself to go further conceptually, which is great to see.
Cheetah, your entries have always been fun for me to read. You really excel at creating catchy and appealing songs - in fact, during my time I don't think I've ever seen you really fail or highly disappoint me in a song, you've been consistent in your delivery and your light style shines throughout your entries. You've proven yourself to be a great writer, and upon continuing to push yourself you'll certainly become even better. Good luck with this!
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I'm glad you liked the song though I agree it's a bit too vague  I think it's a bit of an issue I have with writing in general since all of my songs tend to be vague since I think I'm a bit afraid people won't like a concept, so in that sense I always play it a bit safe.
Hopefully I can pass through next round but I'm glad I was able to make it this far after everything.
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And pears' reviews confirm my theory re: ignoring the challenge and just writing a good song with a kind of standard theme Too bad this isn't like last season (or whenever) when everyone got 2 scores, one for song and one for challenge |
Hence why I ditched my Mark Twain ghost story, though I'll finish it on my deathbed.
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OMG, I just finished ep. 3 a minute ago and it prompted my question. I loved ep 3
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I wish they had merchandise out, I would wear the **** out of a shirt
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I'm glad I wasn't the only one who suffered about not getting weird enough. I thought just using more different descriptive ish and metaphors counted but I wish I had taken a bigger risk, conceptually. After results, I'll post the child sex trafficking song I originally wrote. 
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And pears' reviews confirm my theory re: ignoring the challenge and just writing a good song with a kind of standard theme Too bad this isn't like last season (or whenever) when everyone got 2 scores, one for song and one for challenge |
Not rly tbh. I definitely factor both parts into my score so ppl didn't really get away with that, but it's not on a 50-50 scale, cause that'd be open for some mess. There was only like a 4 or a 4.5 between my highest and lowest - so everythings quite close. Guess it's down to whatever the others thought. But if you were struggling that much you should've spoke up or smnthn
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Dddd the weirdest my ideas got was making my "afraid of storms" song from the perspective of a dog. I figured that they wanted the idea to be unique moreso than weird, so that's what I went for.
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diversity and potential
you'll explore even more areas and ideas and potentially find a very strong middle ground
Even when your entries are a bit messy
Keep me on my seat, keep me guessing
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I wanted to be Bianca, but I was Adore all along
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Same. I think mine was more ~unique~ than ~weird~. Like I'm sure there's never been a song about an undercover cop arresting gay cruisers. I had a few ideas of how to write a non-traditional love song, but I thought the judges wanted something REALLY different and love songs probably make up 90% of songs, so I tried to avoid them.
Anyway, the State of Grace (Acoustic Version)
And I never saw you coming... And I'll never be the same
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Thank you for the review, pears. I think you've done well as a judge, and I've enjoyed reading your critiques.  I still think my song was sufficiently weird, but I've received similar reviews from three judges so I guess not. 
I'm glad you appreciated the lyricism! I'm for sure still experimenting with my style. I wanna be more pop-friendly at some point, I think, but it's fun to explore songwriting freely atm. It never hurts to be versatile.  Thank you for judging us!
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Hugamari - Theodore
This concept is one of the best this round. Everything about this was just quite consistently good - lyrically it was strong, conceptually it was interesting and different, and still kept a level of being open to interpretation, it was all quite well done. The meter is all well, and you also had some moments of really nice language usage. All together, it was just a solid entry I believe.
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Even though you had positive things to say about most of the entries, and Temporal kinda implied that your scores and comments don't really match up, I'm going to believe you liked my entry anyway, so thank you!
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Huga, in general you've been one of the most consistent here from what I've seen. Your concepts have been brilliant and diverse, you've given me emotion, you've creeped me out and you've intrigued me. You always do an amazing job of truly creating a world within a song and paint a detailed picture mentally without reliance on typical imagery. You always give in some of the most polished entries - you very rarely have issues such as meter, which demonstrates how well experienced you are. Your writing has been refreshing to me, and you've definitely shown off your skill and proven your status. Wishing you the best of luck!
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Consistency is my strong-point it seems, although that's a double-edged sword seeing as nothing really stands out in a positive or negative way. I think overall my level of consistency has been a good thing, though. The last part really got me, though, because I think that's why I'm still playing despite being labelled a "winner" in the list of Games and winners.
My season never had a formal finale, and it was literally the host popping into the dead ass thread to nominate me the winner because I was his favorite.  I say that a lot, but I would love SO much to get a real win, or even just make it to a finale because I've never participated in a Platinum hit finale as a contestant. This is also my first time being in a semi-final as a contestant since Season 4.
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I wanted something really different but as an endorser of safe sex I couldn't with the cruising plot
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Is Views a good album? I've never listened to a Drake album but Halsey gave it a shoutout in Tokyo Narita and I follow whatever she says
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I think a new judge coming in around midway into the season was nice though! They aren't drained from the infamous "Round 1/Round 2" type songs, so they're so enthusiastic about judging.
Next season, it should start with 4 judges, but a 5th one should be added midway into the season without any knowledge of the songs the contestants had written up to that point. I think it'd keep that judge from letting their past efforts (from that season) mess with their judgment, at least for a little bit.
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