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Hugamari – Theodore
Pre-reading this song note: I’ve disliked every song this season that was titled a name so hopefully this doesn’t fall into the same rut. [/prereading].
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People using names in songs is what bothers me. I just named it Theodore because I didn't want to name it Teddy and none of the lyrics struck me as title-worthy.
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I actually enjoyed this. Conceptually it was pretty original, even if a little too vague. It wasn’t outright “weird” because you never really took it to that level when you could have quite easily.
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I said this to Temp, but I didn't want to just be weird for the sake of it. Maybe that's what the challenge calls for, but it felt too...akin to "Random xD" for me. I wanted it to be a more...original thought, but in a digestible way as said by the challenge description.
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The only real hint I got of this being about a Teddy Bear was the line “the softness of your arms” which reads weird out of context. In fact, this song suffered mostly from lines that could have been phrased better (“when the lightning falls from the sky”, “shake and tremble with all their might”).
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I could have done a better job at hinting towards it being a teddy bear. I originally wanted to put something about how soft the bear's skin is (referring to fur), but I figured one of the judges would come storming in with an essay about how fur =/= skin, so I opted not to.
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The verses were the highlights here, especially the second one apart from the above noted line.
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Well the judges thought differently about the chorus, but at least I got a...favorable? reaction from both. Thanks Jackson.
. Anyways this was such a thrilling read. Conceptually this was way out of your ball park and I loved that. It still read like a typical you song structurally and through little nuances, but I loved the risks you took here. The Donatella line especially had me 
. I was enthralled the whole time because this was so out of the box. It kinda read like a Lady Gaga song but better. I didn’t love the last two lines in the bridge, as it slightly humanized the character I loved reading into as a brainless psycho. As usual, the biggest issues here were just slight issues with wording which made a few lines flow awkwardly. Otherwise this was my favorite entry from you since the Spanish one.
