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1. Hugamari - Theodore
The imagery here was very ClarksonSlays, see you in court fat! This was an interesting concept, not as far out as I would've liked but it was fairly original. "Lights" by Ellie Goulding kind of handled this topic as well - being afraid of the dark and turning to others for comfort - but I thought the fact that this centered on a teddy bear of all things was quite interesting. I think this is the, if not one of, first song(s) of the season that had a heavy amount of imagery but made it work. The first stanza of the chorus is definitely your standout lyric from the season, and one of the biggest standouts overall. The only place where I thought it got a bit out of hand was the first stanza, where you were describing a dream which of course could be anything, so you threw a lot of vocabulary and images out there as if it were a cadenza. Don't let your word choices - i.e. "apex" - get the best of you. Still, this was really well done.
2. Citrus - Bathtub Castaway
Okay, at first, what I took from this was that it was an abortion in a bathtub told from the perspective of the fetus. THAT would've been an AMAZING concept (let me save it for myself). Instead, this concept definitely wasn't very out there, I guess the original aspect of this would've been that the narrator decided to bleed out in a tub instead of hang or shoot themselves. The lyrics were all pretty tight, and your language was impeccable in a lot of places, but there were some iffy lyrical choices ("I think I’m gonna die... I open up my eyes").
3. theCheetahWings - Eclipse
"He was my lunar eclipse / Curse of the devil on his lips / Taste of the apocalypse" made me "oooo" out loud. What a chorus. The concept here was a bit lackluster, I liked the darkness of it and of it and how your lyrics reflected it, but this could've gotten by in the Free Zone challenge without as much as a second glance. I think instead of writing a song about falling in love with a demon/devil, you could've written a song about being possesed and eventually finding that you don't want to resist it? You always choose uncommon or weird rhyme schemes and this week was no different with ABBA (buy Dancing Queen on iTunes) in the verses, which left some weird couplets "And I gave into his light / Protecting me from harm" (pretty stagnant and boring), "His eyes were burning bright / A demon made of light" (the second line feels like filler and "bright/light" is really overdone). The refrain felt unecessary as well. I'm not sure if you stepped up enough to the plate for this challenge.
4. CountryBritney - Panic on the Runway
Poor whatever Huga's dark song was. Your flow here was pretty darn good here throughout, but it broke hard on "Into an ever growing, ever dying industry" which was a clunky line metrically and purely lyrically. I know 8th will probably nab you for including the repition of the hook and stuff like "*spoken in the background*, I think it added a lot to this piece, I could hear the flow and music in my head; it made this feel well-thought out and put together. This is probably my favorite song of yours, and it serves a lot of Red Carpet Funeral tea!
5. feelslikeadream - Undercover
Your "Dark Side" era I c. And NAWT "Chorus x5"  This wasn't as bad as I expected it to be, I thought the concept was interesting, but definitely not one that can warrant or work with a lot of lyricism or poeticism. I think if you would've focused more on the woods aspect instead of the bathrooms which resulted in having the word "urinal" in your song this could've worked a lot better. You did really WERK double on tundra in this song which resulted in some really clever and crafty lyrics ("Show me your gun and I’ll show you my badge"), and there were also nice plays on words ("Worship unnatural lust in this natural space") but some lines stuck out with their bluntness and weren't very prose-y ("His wedding ring’s a dull, dark gold"). The style was also very narrative, but there wasn't much climax or direction to the story either. I don't think you entirely missed the mark here, but you didn't quite nail it either.
6. Moonchild - Heartbeat Song
Well, this song was lock and key tight with pretty much no complaints from me in the lyrics themselves, however, this was far from a daring or out there concept, especially since the title comes from Kellegend Clarkchrist's worst single. You essentially took Kelly's concept - or her writer's concept - of a "Heartbeat Song" and hearts racing in romance, but just focused more on anatomical imagery and words for the lyrics themselves. It was pretty much the exact opposite of "out there" and your unoriginal title makes it hard to deny that. "Blood cells turn to butterflies" might be one of my fave lyrics from the entire season, though.
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Poor Halsey, making good music consistently but being insufferable 
Plus Drew is 
I wanna stan them