Can you remove all of the parts of my song and not leak a large part of it please? Yes, it was a serious song of mine. And me playing many different games isn't even a factor, so don't bring that up either.
Can you remove all of the parts of my song and not leak a large part of it please? Yes, it was a serious song of mine. And me playing many different games isn't even a factor, so don't bring that up either.
(ANYWAY....) REVIEWS AS THEY COME (ALL OVER YOUR FAVES)
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9. Jaxswim - If You Cant Take The Heat
"Imma (two gunshots)" great lyricism! Condescension aside (am I able to ever put that aside? I dunno, but anyway...) I don't know if this is what Jackson was looking for in his description. ("Gun on me, whiskey on me / Gun on me, bad bitch on me," sounds more like a male anti-Lana Del Rey). There's some conflicting language in here as well with "dust before my wake," clashing with the more... gangster (?) language used. Overall the flow was good (in the verses anyway), though, so it read well out loud. But please, this is a lyrics competition. (Two gunshots) does not cut it. The chorus overall was messy and strife/life seemed rushed.
REVIEWS AS THEY COME (FEMALE E-JACKULATION IS A MYTH)
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10. MattyTacos - Head Over Heart
This started off rather brilliantly but quickly fell into a puddle of cliches. "Sipping on our history, guess I’ll have another drink," is one of my favorite lines this season but if you had deleted "guess" it would have been ten times better. This wasn't a weak entry, it just wasn't as strong as it could have been. The strength lies in the verses, which held this piece together. The bridge also came full circle quite nicely. I like the remarks about the city and streets and "I see you in places we’d never go," is such an emotional line when you really think about it. The surreal/feel rhymes are inexcusable! I can see HRJR using this, though, good job on that!
OK, WOW. Very rarely am I excited line by line as I read an entry but as I was reading this, I was looking forward to the next line. This is truly your magnum opus. The way you incorporated the history of art into this is genius. I also love how in the first verse, the girl went from coming out of the shell to having a pearl earring (THAT'S THE KIND OF STUFF THAT WRITERS WRITE). "Sunday afternoons spent at La Grande Jatte," was clunky and it started feeling almost like a list here but this was quickly amended.
"Begin with the background
And move to the focus
Paint with a passion
For your magnum opus,"
This is ARTPOP if I've ever read it. Easily one of my favorite concepts to date.
ik this is dramatic after just one review but I'm feeling like I'll be out this round. Just... my song wasn't up to par and I can recognize that I think.
OK, WOW. Very rarely am I excited line by line as I read an entry but as I was reading this, I was looking forward to the next line. This is truly your magnum opus. The way you incorporated the history of art into this is genius. I also love how in the first verse, the girl went from coming out of the shell to having a pearl earring (THAT'S THE KIND OF STUFF THAT WRITERS WRITE). "Sunday afternoons spent at La Grande Jatte," was clunky and it started feeling almost like a list here but this was quickly amended.
"Begin with the background
And move to the focus
Paint with a passion
For your magnum opus,"
This is ARTPOP if I've ever read it. Easily one of my favorite concepts to date.
I can see HRJR using this, though, good job on that!
