[ceremonials]

Do you guys like this verse/prechorus? Trying to decide if it's the right direction

You wanted me to be your anchor
I knew that meant I had to drown
So I tried to pull you under
But I only sank farther down

[CountryBritney]

Originally posted by ceremonials

Do you guys like this verse/prechorus? Trying to decide if it's the right direction

You wanted me to be your anchor
I knew that meant I had to drown
So I tried to pull you under
But I only sank farther down

I think it's really strong. Especially as a pre-chorus.

[feelslikeadream]

Originally posted by ceremonials

Do you guys like this verse/prechorus? Trying to decide if it's the right direction

You wanted me to be your anchor
I knew that meant I had to drown
So I tried to pull you under
But I only sank farther down

I don't love the last line (the meter is wrong compared to the first three lines; 'down' is an easy rhyme), but the first three lines are so good

[ceremonials]

Thank you guys! Okay I'm gonna roll with this then. It compares a failing relationship to drowning I feel like that's not original at all but that's all I got rn

[ceremonials]

Am struggling with this challenge. Hopefully weed can save this song. #Pray4Anchor

[swiftie13]

We, the judges had a little agreement that we'd write songs for this round as well. I went with the "flying" type. Here's my song:

The Wind

What rustles through the leaves
Is all you've left behind
Carried through the wind
And rooted in your mind

All the words you never said
Every time you spoke a lie
Become one with the breeze
Felt on faces with closed eyes

What stays embedded in the soil
That you've mindlessly stepped on
Grows into the gardens
Your mother kept you from

Be careful where you step
Don't pick at any flower
I've learned the most beautiful
Are also the most fragile

The rivers of alcohol
You'll drown yourself into
Needing to forget your sorrow
Become the clouds above you

The heaviness of every day
Gets lifted into the sky
Falling down as warm rain
Resembling your tearful eyes

Even when the dust settles
Parts of it stick to your skin
Those around you see the stains
Under your nails and on your hands

and you see theirs too...

All the lovers in your bed
Anyone you've called a friend
All the stories in your head
Become songs in the end

The patience you have lost
The patience you have learned
Surrounds you as the wind
and a life well earned

[Citrus]

Music of the Fruit

Song Toothbrush To Rock Slide

Genre Acoustic Emotional **** Country

Peak 12 1 ?

[Navyofbadgals]

Emotional ****

[Citrus]

@swiftie it did sound too poem-y, but for me it worked

[UFO]

Sent

[feelslikeadream]

swiftie, your song has me SHOOK since death is my biggest fear



(I really liked the last few stanzas btw)

[Achilles.]

I'm switching to psychic. Please update the list.

[Jackson]

My song for this round

DRAW A BLANK
normal

VERSE
I want to waste my life away
Behind a suit and tie
Want to live and lie awake
A wife right by my side
Fade into suburbia
And buy a model home
Same one that my brother owns
Three blocks down the road

PRECHORUS
But voices keep on yelling
Delusion leads the way
So lead me from insanity
Into a world of gray

CHORUS
Lock me in a big white room
Free me from the mind I knew
Beat my thoughts until they break
Mend me till I draw a blank
Hush these screams into a hum
Keep me from what I've become
Torture me until I break
Mend me till I draw a blank

VERSE
I see the world in vivid hues
Of terror and distress
I long at last for ignorance
Just hoping to forget
Have three kids and go to church
Like everyone I know
Want to live a normal life
Where color doesn't go

CHORUS
Lock me in a big white room
Free me from the mind I knew
Beat my thoughts until they break
Mend me till I draw a blank
Hush these screams into a hum
Keep me from what I've become
Torture me until I break
Mend me till I draw a blank

BRIDGE
Sometimes I lie awake at night
Talking to the voice inside
Telling me I won't survive
Beckoning towards the light
Sometimes I lie awake at night
Hoping to escape sometime
Sometimes I lie awake at night
Sometimes I lie...

CHORUS
Lock me in a big white room
Free me from the mind I knew
Beat my thoughts until they break
Mend me till I draw a blank
Hush these screams into a hum
Keep me from what I've become
Torture me until I break
Mend me till I draw a blank

OUTRO
Sometimes I lie awake at night
Talking to the voice inside
Telling me I won't survive
Beckoning towards the light
Sometimes I lie awake at night
Dreaming of a way to die
Sometimes I lie awake at night
Sometimes I lie...

[minho]

Just waiting for a few people to hopefully reply to my PMs and then I can submit.

[feelslikeadream]

Just realized my song is kinda like this

[swiftie13]

Originally posted by Citrus

@swiftie it did sound too poem-y, but for me it worked

thnx

Originally posted by feelslikeadream

swiftie, your song has me SHOOK since death is my biggest fear



(I really liked the last few stanzas btw)

The song is actually about being alive and living with all your memories around you

but thnx (and yas at Mariah. Ha impact on my title!)

[Achilles.]

Originally posted by Jackson

My song for this round

If I was a recording artist I would pay to record this. Your talent.



It serves strong "The Man You Think I Am" in places. Maybe a bit of "Roots Grow Deeper," too. My impact.

[conatus]

I won't be submitting this round. Thanks anyway, and good luck to everyone with the rest of the game.

[swiftie13]

[Achilles.]

conatus pulls a conatus. shocking.