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Tournament: PLATINUM HIT 8
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Originally posted by Moonchild
I completely understand artists have a specific vision and mindset about what they do. Talking about that in interviews in what they're supposed to do, but the way they say things is just annoying. Marina had an entire era centered around satire of the dumb blonde pop star, but it was really her desperately seeking commercial success. And the way she talked her involvement in FROOT is perfectly understandable, but she the way she worded it was irritating and came across as bragging.
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EH Marina was so annoying to watch. The whole "I'm parodying today's pop stars cos they're all so vapid" when she's working with Dr Luke and Greg Kurstin desperate for a hit and then touring with Katy Perry, to then turn around and say it was just a big joke, she hated all of it, she felt constrained, etc. No sis. 
It's the same with this era. The FROOT of the month thing was sorta cute but was nothing more than a marketing gimmick even tho she tried iT with the whole "I'm a real artisT, I wrote all my songs!".
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Yeah I didn't mind this challenge too much. It forced me to write something completely outside of myself and totally fictional.
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Originally posted by Moonchild
I liked this challenge. It made me think differently and take a different approach than I would have otherwise. Judging takes a while, I'm sure, but I think we'd all rather in-depth, constructive critiques than rushed ones.
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Pretty much. Plus we learn new words - a Mariah Carey tea. Huga said the people leaving just means we get an opportunity for more detailed feedback which would be extremely valuable.
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Sleep (Interlude)
Bitter Pill
Unorthodox Jukebox
How I Feel
Rebel Kings
| Rank
#7
#5
#16
#11
#tba
| Score
8.18
8.4
7.83
7.84
tba
| Genre
Alt Hip-Hop
Country Folk
Funk/Pop
Alternative rock, post-grunge
Baroque Poppy allegedly
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 Sleep (Interlude)Sleep (Interlude)
This right here is the moment that I dread
The moment that I hate
When the night is so dead
My thoughts overtake
Spiral deeper into bed
As I speculate and exaggerate
Life and it's events
Or lack of.
Mo' money mo' problems
It's a fad.
No money more problems
It's sad.
Lack of.
Lack of love
Lack of money
Lack of sleep.
I need to sleep
A deep sleep
That sleeping beauty type of sleep
That Snow White poison apple type of sleep
A sleep so deep that's it's hard for the thoughts to creep
The deepest sleep that wouldn't make me leap
The moment my Charming comes and kisses me on the cheek.
These thoughts just won't go away
Why do they stay?
Fuck off, if you may?
Wide awake, here I lay
Tossing
Turning
The bed squeaks as I sway
It's ridiculous
Frustrating
Infuriating
I feel the tears falling down my ears
And I think back over the years…
…Oh shit, not this again
Running around in circles
The clock tick tocks
Fuck.
I'm sick of this shit.
Just close your eyes.
Don't think.
Just be.
Fall asleep.
Bitter Pill
Bitter Pill
Verse:
Glory days have come and gone
Like the rising sun at dawn
The seasons of my life have spun
As I wonder, what have I done?
Pre-chorus:
I guess I should swallow this bitter pill
Instead of pretending this isn’t real
Chorus:
Oh how I wish I, how I wish I
Could give life another try
Wouldn’t stop for anyone
Won’t pick up no passers-by
I wouldn’t let anyone influence my mind
Oh how I wish I, how I wish I
Could give life another try
Verse:
As the colours change naturally
I’m overcome with jealousy
So I look over my shoulder
Hoping time turns to nostalgia
Pre-chorus
Chorus
Bridge:
Who told me life would be this way?
The hurt, the lies, regrets, and pain
Maybe I should take the blame
I keep on searching through the rain
For a chance to do this all again
Chorus
Unorthodox Jukebox
Unorthodox Jukebox
Verse 1:
It’s Friday night, I just clocked off my 9 to 5.
Dancin’ rowdy all night, gonna party, get high
Everybody move your thighs, to the left to the right
It’s time to jook ‘n’ jive, shimmy, shimmy, shake ‘n’ slide.
Hook:
I can’t stop. I’m on top.
Won’t stop moving even when the beat drops
I’m getting down, hip-hop
Everybody come on over let’s bop
Verse 2:
I just want a funky beat to get me up off my feet
MJ Thriller in the street, look at me I’m on heat
Everybody, let’s compete, even if you’re offbeat
When the music is complete I’mma just press repeat
Hook:
I can’t stop. I’m on top.
Won’t stop moving even when the beat drops
I’m getting down, hip-hop
Everybody come on over let’s bop
Chorus:
This is for the whole world
For all my boys, all my girls
No matter where you are
Get on that air guitar
Groove on top that roof top
The bedroom, that back drop.
Put a dollar in the jukebox
We’re gonna act unorthodox
Post-chorus 1:
So move it, move it, now
Move it, move it, now (x3)
So groove it, groove it, now
Groove it, groove it, now (x3)
Verse 3:
I don’t even give a damn, I just wanna act stupid
I’m gonna bam bam, gonna shoot like I’m Cupid
All these girls on the floor, I’m outta control
Janet Jack, Kendrick, I guess I’m on a roll
Hook
Verse 4:
Booty Beys, shake your knees, single ladies, look at me
How I’m rockin’ my feet, let’s get down to the funky beat
When you feel it in your bones you can’t help but dance along
I just want some rock’n’roll. Play some R&B or soul
Hook
Pre-chorus
Chorus
Post-chorus 2:
So move it, move it, now
Move it, move it, now (x3)
So shake it, shake it, now
Shake it, shake it, now (x3)
Bridge:
Let’s jam to some Armstrong
Some James Brown. Some Sly Stone.
Some Elvis.
DJ give me some Beatle.
Some “Hey Joe”. Some Purple.
Some Drizzy.
Let’s vogue to some Donna
Some Minnie. Some Tina.
Some Shuggie.
Let’s get it on to Marvin
Some Usher, some Jay-Z
Hey Stevie.
Hook
Chorus x 2
Outro:
Break it down now!
Shoo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-pa-pa
Di-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-di-pa-pa
Strings! [scat repeated using strings]
Shoo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-pa-pa
Di-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-di-pa-pa
Horns! [scat repeated using horns]
Shoo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-pa-pa
Di-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-di-pa-pa
Guitar! [scat repeated using guitar]
Shoo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-pa-pa
Di-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-di-pa-pa
Drums! [scat repeated using drums]
Shoo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-pa-pa
Di-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-di-pa-pa
Club! [scat repeated using hip-hop beat]
Shoo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-pa-pa
Di-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-doo-bi-di-pa-pa
I’m done.
How I Feel
How I Feel
Verse 1:
Trying to write a song
But I can’t find the words
To describe how I hate
The way you came into my world
Tied me in with your love
You wrapped me up in chains
You took your 30 pieces
But the shackle scars remain
Pre-chorus:
The damage is done
I’m one in a queue
I’ve got a loaded gun
And it’s aimed at you
Chorus:
I hope you fall ill to your desires
Something no pill can heal
I hope you’re engulfed in my fire
So you know how I feel
I hope you come under a bus
And I’m behind the wheel
So I can do what you did to us
So you know how I feel
Verse 2:
Trying to forget you
But I keep picturing him
When I lie in my bed
And pretend we’re limb to limb
Tell me was it worth it?
Feeding me your lies
As you won over my heart
With your quixotic disguise
Pre-chorus
Chorus
Bridge:
Maybe if you said you’re sorry?
Maybe I could make amends?
But why should I re-write the story
When you’re the one that penned “The end”
Don’t make it out like it’s my fault
Don’t say that I’m to blame
You’re the one that locked the vault
And threw the key into the flames
Chorus
Bridge 2:
I guess I’m better off alone
It’s better than being betrayed
You were my first forever more
It’s too bad it was all a charade
Chorus
Rebel Kings
Rebel Kings
Verse:
The wind has come to take our souls
And there’s no blood around our doors
We’re rebels, let’s revel.
All of the rules that we’ve ignored
Our love has been our esprit de corps
We’re rebels. Big devils
Pre-Chorus:
They’ll never beam with pride
Not with this love we hide
But what we have is bliss
I won’t let go of this
Chorus:
Let’s go down the deep ravine
Along the green boreen.
Let’s find ourselves a ghost town
A place we’ll wear the crown.
From the embers of desire
We’ll build our own empire.
We’re the kings. We wear the crowns
In our small ghost town
Verse 2:
There’s no one there, no one to fear
Our love is strong, we’ll persevere
We’re rebels, let’s revel.
No need to hide, we’re side by side.
There, our love can’t be denied
We’re rebels. Big devils.
Pre-Chorus:
They’ll never beam with pride
Not with this love we hide
But what we have is bliss
I won’t let go of this
Chorus:
Let’s go down the deep ravine
Along the green boreen.
Let’s find ourselves a ghost town
A place we’ll wear the crown.
From the embers of desire
We’ll build our own empire.
We’re the kings. We wear the crowns
In our small ghost town
Bridge:
Let’s build a fort around us
Enchant some spells to keep them out
No one will come between us
The bricks and ghouls will drown them out
Let’s form ourselves an army
Convert our sins to angels’ rings
They’ll beg and say they’re sorry
They’ll bow and worship us as kings
Chorus:
Let’s go down the deep ravine
Along the green boreen.
Let’s find ourselves a ghost town
A place we’ll wear the crown.
From the embers of desire
We’ll build our own empire.
We’re the kings. We wear the crowns
In our small ghost town
Not here for the clear pattern of low-high-low-high...I want it high-high-high from now on
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Buzz word of the week: Thunder
It's in like all of y'alls songs 
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I think my accent messes up my syllable count and meter sometime.  Like, apparently prayer is two syllables so I imagine people in the US say it as "pray - yer", whereas I pronounce it as "prair".
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ATRL Contributor
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Originally posted by Vulnicura
I think my accent messes up my syllable count and meter sometime. Like, apparently prayer is two syllables so I imagine people in the US say it as "pray - yer", whereas I pronounce it as "prair". |
I've learned to read it as both, but my accent has it as one!
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Buzz word of the week part 2: trace/traced
What a weird word to be used a lot
Also, I am taking the LONGEST time to do these because I'll read like one entry, then watch a 30 minute YouTube video.
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Quote:
Originally posted by Vulnicura
I think my accent messes up my syllable count and meter sometime. Like, apparently prayer is two syllables so I imagine people in the US say it as "pray - yer", whereas I pronounce it as "prair". |
I'm American and I say "prair" too
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If I were to be "correct", I'd say prayer is 2 syllables, but I can see a case for one syllable, so it's unlikely that I'd comment on meter issues for someone using prayer as a one-syllable word.
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Originally posted by Hugamari
If I were to be "correct", I'd say prayer is 2 syllables, but I can see a case for one syllable, so it's unlikely that I'd comment on meter issues for someone using prayer as a one-syllable word.
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Oh I see. 
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Someone's getting a perfect score from me. 
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Originally posted by Hugamari
Someone's getting a perfect score from me. |
Give us a hint, does their username have a vowel in it? 
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Originally posted by ClarksonSlays
Give us a hint, does their username have a vowel in it? |
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batch 1, its power!
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Originally posted by ClarksonSlays
Give us a hint, does their username have a vowel in it? |
I am under legal contract to not say anything. If I do, I'll get sued.
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Oh, and I finally got around to submitting my scores for batch one. It literally took me 5 hours from reading the first song to submitting all my comments and scores for the batch.
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Quote:
Originally posted by Hugamari
I am under legal contract to not say anything. If I do, I'll get sued.
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so it's swiftie13?
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Originally posted by Hugamari
Oh, and I finally got around to submitting my scores for batch one. It literally took me 5 hours from reading the first song to submitting all my comments and scores for the batch. |
Yas now when does Australian sis Sam awaken?
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Quote:
Originally posted by Hugamari
Oh, and I finally got around to submitting my scores for batch one. It literally took me 5 hours from reading the first song to submitting all my comments and scores for the batch. |
The dedication  .
Do you have the energy for Batch 2 or are you going to take a break?
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