Here's my entry if anyone wants a read/wants to critique.
Jack Lees - Night NightVERSE
I bare my troubles in an empty room
Inside my head, the walls are gloom
The fire below at my feet feels so cold
There’s nothing I feel, I’m not alive anymore
CHORUS
“Come, take my hand” said the devil in my head
“And I’ll lay you down in your cold and lonely bed
Ignore the voices of the ones who will help
Or I’ll block your ears, cut them off and leave you deaf”
VERSE
I can’t escape this never-ending maze
Permanently gagged, there’s no mouth to scream
The darkness blinds me day after day
There’s nothing to see, there’s no part left of me
CHORUS
“Come, take my hand” said the devil in my head
“And I’ll lay you down in your cold and lonely bed
Ignore the voices of the ones who will help
Or I’ll block your ears, cut them off and leave you deaf”
“You’ll be alright” said the stranger in the dark
“I’m here to help you, now it’s time to leave your mark
No one will care when you take your last breath
You and I both know you’d be better off dead”
BRIDGE
I watch the hand on the clock tick backwards
They all told me to change, they all had the answers
I count the last hour, live in the end of time
Maybe things would be different, had I lived a different life
CHORUS
“Come, take my hand” said the devil in my head
“And I’ll lay you down in your cold and lonely bed
Ignore the voices of the ones who will help
Or I’ll block your ears, cut them off and leave you deaf”
“You’ll be alright” said the stranger in the dark
“I’m here to help you, now it’s time to leave your mark
No one will care when you take your last breath
You and I both know you’d be better off dead”
“Don’t be afraid” said the demon in my mind
“They’ll forget all about you in a matter of time
There’s nothing to fear, I’m right by your side
Close your eyes, turn off the light, it’s time to say night night”.
I am both CRIPPLED and overjoyed
