Huga and Meowster, if you can't get detailed comments done that's okay. Everyone has busy weeks and real life happens. I think my comments are long enough for the three of us anyway. If you can submit scores, that's the main thing.
keshaspearsxo – Plus, Ed Sheeran
This was a great entry. I actually like how you didn’t incorporate the title into the song until the end, that outro just tied it all together, the entire song was about one heart ‘plus’ another, so it the title was used as inspiration more than just slotting it in somewhere, which is fantastic. I definitely was able to read it with Ed Sheeran’s voice and it had a good flow, which I could see Ed following, he does sing about his feelings a lot and does the fast-sing thing too, which I picked up on in places. The single-word repetitions (mind, mind, mind etc.) weren’t too over the top and again it’s something I can see Ed doing. You have no forced rhymes and lots of great lyrical choices, so really great work.
Did it fit the challenge?
For sure, it’d fit right in with ‘Plus’, it could be an album opener, somewhere in the middle or even an outro, it’d a very versatile song in my opinion. Overall, you did a really solid job.
Also I'm glad you picked up on the fast singing thing because I feel like my songs could be interpreted as sollum ballads or something from the lyrical content but often they are fast paced
Huga and Meowster, if you can't get detailed comments done that's okay. Everyone has busy weeks and real life happens. I think my comments are long enough for the three of us anyway. If you can submit scores, that's the main thing.
I only have mobile as an option for the next three days so it might just have to be score only. We'll see.
There is also a very unfair advantage, since there are plenty of albums here that the judges have never listened to, they wouldn't know what you are trying to replicate, which can be an advantage too because you can slide with something irrelevant to the topic
Yeah I hated this challenge. I had so much inspiration this and it was wasted because I couldn't write something for myself
My favorite part about PH is how much I grow as a writer, if anything this pulled back.
Now these are just excuses for you flopping and getting bad comments.
Sometimes songwriting has to take other forms than just being or writing about yourself. Look at Sia, she can put herself into a persons shoes, look at their life, and write a song as them. Katy Perry has her childish character. And honestly let's not fool around all of y'all are always in here talking about "wow this song is slaying me I'm so inspired" blah blah, it's not like y'all aren't already writing for other artists.
20. swiftie13 – Confessions on a Dance Floor, Madonna
This definitely read as a Madonna dance bop, so effortlessly too, I couldn’t not read it in Madonna’s voice, actually. You blended the concepts of religious confession and dancing really well, it didn’t feel forced. Your flow is good and there’s a lot of lyrics to like here, “I’m dancing for a second chance” is so simple but so great, and so Madonna. “As I get rid of all my shame” is probably the most awkward lyric in the song if I had to pick something, an edit like “As I’m relieved of all my shame” would sound better. But overall you produced a quality dance bop with meaning behind the lyrics, something so few can seem to do.
Did it fit the challenge?
Absolutely. Madonna better record this for her next Greatest Hits compliation.
Thanks so much tbh the shame line was the one line I spent like an hour on not knowing what to do with it but I felt like the chorus would be incomplete with something thay conveyed its message. I per free your suggestion by a lot. I couldn't think of anything, I was brain dead.
But anyway, I'm happy you thought it was very Madge like!
26. Urban_Fan – Fortune, Chris Brown
No soundcloud this time? I really like the direction you took with this challenge, because you could have gone down the “I’m worth a fortune” route or even the chance/luck route… there were many ways you could have taken this. I like the angle of a relationship where your partner just wants to use you for your fame and fortune. The “severely bruised” lyric comes across as a little bit forced for me, I’m just not a big fan of it, but the rest of the song is very solid. It’s simple but simple done right, everything flows well and it feels like an actual song Chris might write or record.
Did it fit the challenge?
I think Chris could do something like this well, I’ve only heard a couple of the singles from the album and they’re more dance-pop, but this could even be a dance ballad type thing.
If you can submit scores, that's the main thing.
We'll see.
tbh the shame line was the one line I spent like an hour on not knowing what to do with it but I felt like the chorus would be incomplete with something thay conveyed its message. I per free your suggestion by a lot. I couldn't think of anything, I was brain dead.
I really, really wanted to use that, though.
