There’s a typo in the 3rd line and there’s really no structure here. It’s also too short and I don’t really know what you’re trying to get at with this song.
My score makes a lot more sense now. It was my intention to make the song unclear.
The writing itself is fairly average. Your structure, flow, and rhyme choices could all use a bit of work but nothing major. I did love your theme, however, and could see it carrying fluidly throughout an album.
I wouldve scored lowered if I kept my original and didnt receive feedback from Nait
27. Oasis (Interlude)
Might I just start by saying your flow is absolutely flaw free. This should be the standard to the other contestants. You could experiment with it a little, but I can’t really complain there. Your language is pretty but I did find the meaning of the song to be a bit muddled by the poeticism of the lyrics. Remember to keep the balance between sounding pretty and having emotional impact.
I'm so happy this is a positive critique Not bad for my first real song
Hope I get another shot though, I can do way better.
I'm so happy this is a positive critique 
