| |
Tournament: PLΔTINUM HIT 7
ATRL Contributor
Member Since: 8/19/2013
Posts: 56,234
|
Let me change my avi and see how TT reacts.
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 9/1/2012
Posts: 25,973
|
Quote:
Originally posted by Truth Teller
Did you really need "on this site" to get your point across?
 |
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 1/1/2014
Posts: 41,181
|
 Betty Boop (8thPrince)You captured the spirit of Erotica (and Madonna) pretty well I think. The larger words like emblazoned and fantasize seem to stretch out and give the song a certain sense of rhythm. I like your word choices overall actually, none of the words are harsh sounding, and softer in nature which makes the song feel sensual. You chorus was pretty nice also, I imagine it talk-sung like how Madonna does sometimes. The song title is a bit tacky, but that seems to fit in with Madonna's aesthetic to me. Granted, there are some moments that feel weaker to me, the second part of the chorus just feels awkward with the listing of body parts. But I think you nailed the sensual tone and imagery overall. One of my favorite entries from you
Different Air (conatus)
I think that parts of the song were a little too directly opinionated in its description to fit in on The Suburbs "People in this town, they're all the same," stuck out to me. Part of why The Suburbs is mostly great is because you get a glimpse of the narrator's character and how that is shaped by his surroundings and how the description of The Suburbs gives the listener the sense of balance between optimism and pessimism like you described. You hit that feeling with the pre-chorus though and with "the strangers I've met" line. I think it's a strong song, and I like how you used repetition of your lines to fit in with the structure of the other Suburb songs
Gales Of Time (ClarksonSlays)
The title is attention grabbing and the concept of the song is interesting. The language is pretty powerful and dramatic which fits in with the style of Florence + her machines in my opinion. I'm not too sure about the "human story" line in the second chorus since it comes across as redundant as the narrator's story is expected to be a human one. I did also find myself waiting for a stand-out line though or maybe something to give the "gale of time" lyric more meaning and hammer that home, but I didn't necessarily get that, but the lyrics were solid throughout.
I Dont Need You (Hugamari)
Yes! After reading the first verse, I was completely on board with what was being said and how it was being said. I feel like Christina is very direct with her lyrics, especially on Stripped and liked your direct approach here. It all flows together very well thematically and conveys proper emotion without coming across as generic. I do think a couple lyrics throw off the tone slightly though. "Accord" and "endeavor," stick out a little to me because the other language is so direct and immediate and those two words just seem to hit less effectively.
In Your Hand (JustLuke)
I think the lyrics might be slightly too metaphorical and contain too much imagery for Katy (A fallen father from a white dove). At the same time, I think at times I would have liked more detail. "Embrace your personality" could be given more color ("let your colors burst") for flavor and more meaning. In addition, while solid, I think that because the lyrics focus so much on advice, it can read as a listing rather than song centered around a central topic or metaphor, like Katy's often do.
Keep Me Satisfied (GotSkill)
That first verse captures Amy's image pretty nicely, right down to the "whiskey stained sheets" It is a little logically inconsistent, she seems to have just stumbled in, but has also been in bed with no sleep? I'm not too sure about the chorus and the private lover lyric, since it seems to be redundant, but overall great word choices to set the atmosphere of the song.
King (lovesong)
There were parts I really liked. The shorter words in the intro gave a nice tension, the lyric "take it all like you want to win" is pretty great. I'm not too sure what the word "feening" is though in the verse and I think the song might cover too much ground thematically, the lyrics go from instrospection in the bridge and one of the verses, to a suggestive sex song in the chorus. Both are fine, just jarring going back and forth between the two.
Land Of The Green (EuphorianSea)
I think the lyrics are appropriately Lanaesque, filled with words with romantic connotation with plenty of nostalgia thrown in ("Running wild like I'm 17" ). There are a couple moments where I thought the lyrics might not be completely like something Lana would put together (I'm not sure Lana would call something a "merry-go-round" over a carosel and I don't know if I've heard her question herself much or admit to not knowing stuff like when she says "there's so much I want to know"). I do like how the verses relate to the chorus, although I do think (at least in the case of Lana the song topic and subject should play a more central role)
Silver Lining (Era)
The lyrics seem pretty Swift-ian to me. They have these really nice little details like "flickering city lights," a "blue dress all wet," "dancing around the fountains" that really flavor the world created in the song. There are a couple sections that could flow better, "the stumbling" line in the first verse and some parts in the bridge aren't as clearly worded as the verses and chorus, but a great entry with nice story-telling. The chorus especially was great: simple, but meaningful
Tombstone (keshaspearsxo)
As far as the title goes, I'm not entirely sure about something so-titled or themed appearing on 21 since 21 steers away from the mention of death . A couple easy rhymes "fatal"/"stable" and I would have liked more rhymes throughout. Also, the lyrics are more on the poetic side, and the chorus especially seems more in line with the Hozier album than 21. I do like how closely the lyrics revolved around the topic of the song though and there were a couple powerful lines that stood out (Even if the grave is dug / Your side remains my home" stuck me as particularly meaningful)
Top Level (Sam)
I think the female section was much stronger than the Kanye bars. I thought the Kanye lyrics had less impressive word play, sillier references, and a flow that was less tight, than the feature so good job capturing the essence of a typical Kanye verse. It's a tiny thing, but I really liked how you transitioned to the chorus from the verses, each last verse line seemed to lead right into the chorus. Nice overall word play (I liked the card references especially). A couple rhymes do fall a little flat ("kettle"/"settle" "important"/"dormant") and the verses brought it, but the chorus itself feels much weaker in comparison with its "kettle"/"medal" rhyme and metaphor. It might have been stronger with by just being straight-forward without the analogies
Wooden Heart (inuborg)
I feel like evanescene have these emotionally charged words that carry a lot of feeling behind them and I think that that style was maintained in the lyrics for wooden heart. There are some powerful lyrics here, but also some that don't quite seem to relate to the rest, for example the "coffin" line in verse one references a coffin that makes the narrator sick, which seems like an understatement, the "shade" line in verse 2 that doesn't relate as well to the floating on the ocean lines previously. I do also feel like the idea of the wooden heart was interesting and wished it was fleshed out more.
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 1/1/2014
Posts: 57,339
|
Quote:
Originally posted by Sam
Let me change my avi and see how TT reacts.
|
You really do want to be me so bad!
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 9/1/2012
Posts: 25,973
|
Quote:
Originally posted by Truth Teller
Bloomers' reviews are coming in about 4 - 5 mins.
Then, no bitch is safe
 |
I assume "no bitch" is my new nickname
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 8/31/2013
Posts: 21,462
|
Quote:
Originally posted by Era
Thank you FeFe  Really appreciated  |
Wait, my review seems so negative when you were in my top 6 
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 1/1/2014
Posts: 57,339
|
Thank you Bloomers!
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 9/1/2012
Posts: 25,973
|
Quote:
|
I think the lyrics are appropriately Lanaesque, filled with words with romantic connotation with plenty of nostalgia thrown in ("Running wild like I'm 17" ). There are a couple moments where I thought the lyrics might not be completely like something Lana would put together (I'm not sure Lana would call something a "merry-go-round" over a carosel and I don't know if I've heard her question herself much or admit to not knowing stuff like when she says "there's so much I want to know"). I do like how the verses relate to the chorus, although I do think (at least in the case of Lana the song topic and subject should play a more central role)
|
I'm liking the Burlesque promo in the first line 
Yasss that line in the chorus was my main inspiration tbh
Nostalgia
I agree with the last past, thanks! 
|
|
|
|
ATRL Contributor
Member Since: 8/19/2013
Posts: 56,234
|
Quote:
Originally posted by conatus
You really do want to be me so bad!
|
I wouldn't trade my three #1s for your four musty #2s any day.
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 1/1/2014
Posts: 57,339
|
Quote:
Originally posted by Sam
I wouldn't trade my three #1s for your four musty #2s any day.
|
Poor Sa#12m.
|
|
|
|
ATRL Contributor
Member Since: 8/19/2013
Posts: 56,234
|
Quote:
Originally posted by feelslikeadream
Wait, my review seems so negative when you were in my top 6 |
Mine too. 
Can you explain what you mean about it not being true?
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 1/1/2014
Posts: 57,339
|
The fact that at this stage of the competition, I am basically a Britney stan. Clinging on to the past, bringing up old stats...
|
|
|
|
ATRL Contributor
Member Since: 8/19/2013
Posts: 56,234
|
Quote:
Originally posted by conatus
The fact that at this stage of the competition, I am basically a Britney stan. Clinging on to the past, bringing up old stats...
|
There are other Fameous singers that this could apply to...
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 1/1/2014
Posts: 57,339
|
Quote:
Originally posted by Sam
There are other Fameous singers that this could apply to...
|
I thought you were still a Little Gremlin?
|
|
|
|
ATRL Contributor
Member Since: 8/19/2013
Posts: 56,234
|
Everyone liked my female verse best.  Nicki has ruined me.
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 1/1/2014
Posts: 57,339
|
Sam struggling to write something decent from the male point-of-view. What's new?
|
|
|
|
ATRL Senior Member
Member Since: 1/6/2014
Posts: 8,787
|
Quote:
Originally posted by feelslikeadream
Wait, my review seems so negative when you were in my top 6 |
No worries 
and thank you so much Bloomy
|
|
|
|
ATRL Contributor
Member Since: 8/19/2013
Posts: 56,234
|
Quote:
Originally posted by conatus
I thought you were still a Little Gremlin?
|
I am. Forever a Mini-Fridge, TityCat and Manster4Life
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 1/1/2014
Posts: 41,181
|
Results are coming up.
Hint : There are 3 contestants who reached their peak to date (you already know that). All 3 of them are in this week's top 3
|
|
|
|
Member Since: 9/1/2012
Posts: 25,973
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
