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Tournament: PLΔTINUM HIT 7
Member Since: 9/12/2012
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Omg Matty Records hires...  I'm nervous freidsjc I did have a feeling my song would be received well but just not seen as a suitable song for the label.
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 Blooming Up RecordsLiar - The first verse is probably my favorite part of the song, as it tells a great story that leads up to the climax of the song (the betrayal/lying in the chorus) after you opening your arms out to trust her. Plus, I also loved the great imagery, such as, “Blood on my hands and your noose around my neck”. I am mixed about your pre-choruses though, I just didn’t think they were as up to par as the rest of the song was. Not that the pre-chorus hurts the song a lot, it’s just not a strong point. Besides the pre-choruses, I loved your chorus, “You’re the martyr, forcing each teardrop” is another one of my favorite lines from the song.
MonarC Records
Embrace - The first verse is a strong start to the song, especially with the quick rhyming and the unique comparisons/lines. The build up with the pre-chorus is really good, “I know it’s hard, it’s worth the ride. I breathe purpose into your life” such beautiful lyrics. I think you could’ve gone in harder with the chorus, but it’s simple and well done. The post-chorus is a lot stronger than the chorus, and hits a lot harder too. I don’t think the second verse is as strong as the first but it’s definitely still cute and sorta works. I’m mixed on the bridge though, it sounded awkward half the time (stop growing as one, race we call life) but it’s pretty solid.
Ferris Wheel - The first verse is so good, it immediately captured my attention and drew me into the song. The lyrics, were simple, yet effective and memorizing. The pre-chorus is a nice build-up, doesn’t go in hard, but it’s cute. I love the chorus though, very calming and sweet. The second verse is just as great as the first, but probably didn’t have the same punch. And your bridge, so beautiful. This is your best song and one of my favorites.
Heartwater - I liked the start of the first verse, but I think the second half of the first verse goes in way harder than the first half. Also love the impulse line, so well written. I liked the pre-chorus, it’s simple, but works. The chorus goes in hard, probably one of my favorite choruses of this round. I didn’t really like the second verse too much, and thought it was a step down from the first. The bridge is much better and is my favorite part of the entire song. I think this is my favorite entry of yours.
Truth Records
All Night - The first verse is solid but I think you have some awkward phrasing, such as “put your hands, touch my hair”, I get that he’s probably touching your hair but it feels like a line or two is missing so it sounds awkward. But, besides that I really liked the first verse. I don’t like the pre-chorus much at all either, and I feel like you could’ve gone in harder. My favorite part is easily the chorus and is my favorite part of the entire song. It’s so well written and actually a bop.
Atari - I thought the first verse had some great storytelling lyrics, explaining how the lover you were with is out with his friends and it upsets you. The chorus had such an interesting use of the title and the meaning behind the title. Somehow, it works really well and it makes the song more enjoyable. I don’t think the second verse was as good as the first, but it was still solid. I also loved the candy crush reference in the bridge too, it’s my favorite lyric from the song, and was cute.
Ribcage - I thought that the first verse was pretty simple but had some good storytelling lyrics, I did think the bodies screaming line was awkward and didn’t really make any sense. I liked the second half of the chorus, the lyrics were very poetic and well written. I preferred the second verse to the first, I thought the second half of it was unique and worked really well. The outro is probably my favorite part, only cause it’s so sweet.
Take A Bow - I really liked the start of the song, it had a good urban-ish feel to the lyrics, but I thought the French part didn’t make sense (well I don’t speak French or get what the lyrics were) and the boo hoo lyric was awkward. Otherwise, it was a solid start. I liked the chorus, probably my favorite part of the whole song, so sassy. I also thought the omg line in the second verse was kinda awkward, but it works and reminds me of something that would be off Mariah’s Memoirs. I liked the bridge but I don’t think it was up to par with the rest of the song.
The Next Time - I really enjoyed the first verse, but I thought calling your lover a kid was kinda an awkward line. I liked the first half of the pre-chorus, but merry way sounded a bit stiff and didn’t really flow well. I liked the second verse too, it was simple, and I didn’t have any problems with it. My favorite part is easily the bridge, the mailing line was great. This entry was pretty mixed for me, there were some parts I liked and others that could’ve used a quick edit.
On Loving For The First Time - I thought the first half of the first verse, the walking part, was kinda awkward and doesn’t hold up to the rest of the verse, which goes in much harder. I like the final part of the first verse, with the moonlight (Ariana Grande ha impact). I thought the chorus was cute but didn’t do much for me. The bridge would’ve been a much better way to introduce the first verse for the whole walking lyric.
**** Boys - The first verse is a bop, the melody and the flow is great and on point and works. I did think there were one or two lines that I cringed a bit at but overall it was a good start to the song. The pre-chorus is fierce and goes in. I thought the first half of the chorus was awkward, but I liked the don’t f*ck with no f*ck boys part. But, why does this sound like Big Sean (ft. Ariana). I liked the second verse, but I definitely preferred the first. I thought the spoken outro was a bit awkward.
Tymphonic Records
Devil’s Gun - It took me a second read it understand the song more clearly and like it a lot more. I thought the first verse had some poetic words, my favorite being kneeling down to the devil’s grin. I thought the chorus was kinda awkward and didn’t really live up to the first verse’s poetic/descriptive language, so it makes the chorus stick out like a sore thumb as the “weak” part of the song. The second verse punches a lot harder than the first, and is better written, probably my favorite verse you have written.
Freak - I really like the first verse, you used very poetic and descriptive lyrics to describe how you were the ‘monster’, Some lines were creepy, like the sing to the shrieks, which is a good thing of course. The pre-chorus is a great build-up to the chorus. My favorite part is easily the chorus, it’s so well written and is a great climax to the song. The second verse goes in way harder than the first, and tells more of a story (how the tables have turned) which I liked a lot more. Wait, nevermind, my favorite part is easily the bridge. the eye of the beholder/devil inside line is easily the best part of the song and overall your best line honestly.
Reptile - I thought you had a good first verse, but the play ugly for daddy line was kinda stiff and didn’t really make any sense to me. I’m mixed on the chorus, I did like the first half of it but the second half wasn’t as strong as it, I really loved the second verse, for the soundtrack/somberness line. I liked the first half of the bridge, and thought it was well written, but I still find the play ugly for daddy line so awkward.
Unravel - I had to reread the first verse to understand what you were going for, but on the second reread I thought it was a lot better and it made your point flow nicely with descriptive language. The pre-chorus is a great lead up to the chorus, and actually holds some of my favorite lyrics of the song. I liked the chorus but I don’t think it lived up to the pre-chorus. Wait, scratch what I said, I think my favorite lyric was the skin and bone one, kinda reminded me of Treacherous. I liked the bridge but I didn’t think it really added to the song much and there were much better parts, like verse 2 and the pre-chorus.
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Member Since: 9/1/2012
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Praying for y'all
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ATRL Contributor
Member Since: 8/19/2013
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Yeah The Roof is great. The lyrics are so good too, the vocabulary is great and it doesn't feel excessive.
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Member Since: 1/1/2014
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I'm so ****ing stupid. This is what happens when I doubt myself every time.
I saw the opportunity to go pop, said no cause it was too obvious and went R&B/pop. I have no one to blame but myself. But it's all good I'll just have to trust my instincts a bit better. And even then my 2nd verse and bridge were weak. 
EPIC don't fire me baby. I'll make a new album!
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Wait at Matty's complete praise  Save me bitch!
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Unravel - I had to reread the first verse to understand what you were going for, but on the second reread I thought it was a lot better and it made your point flow nicely with descriptive language. The pre-chorus is a great lead up to the chorus, and actually holds some of my favorite lyrics of the song. I liked the chorus but I don’t think it lived up to the pre-chorus. Wait, scratch what I said, I think my favorite lyric was the skin and bone one, kinda reminded me of Treacherous. I liked the bridge but I didn’t think it really added to the song much and there were much better parts, like verse 2 and the pre-chorus.
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Noted and appreciated.
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Member Since: 1/2/2014
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"So I wear my disguise 'til I go home at night
And turn down all the lights and then break down and cry"
If I could write something with that kind of punch/pizzazz >>>
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Member Since: 7/15/2012
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Yas Matty
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Yeah, it's put your hands [in my hair], touch my hair.
Yas I guess this review is good 
The judges are liking the chorus but it's my least favorite part 
Now where's the ranking.
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Member Since: 9/12/2012
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Omgih
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Embrace - The first verse is a strong start to the song, especially with the quick rhyming and the unique comparisons/lines. The build up with the pre-chorus is really good, “I know it’s hard, it’s worth the ride. I breathe purpose into your life” such beautiful lyrics. I think you could’ve gone in harder with the chorus, but it’s simple and well done. The post-chorus is a lot stronger than the chorus, and hits a lot harder too. I don’t think the second verse is as strong as the first but it’s definitely still cute and sorta works. I’m mixed on the bridge though, it sounded awkward half the time (stop growing as one, race we call life) but it’s pretty solid.
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No one has ever called my lyrics beautiful before omg
The pre-chorus was actually the first part I wrote
Yeah, it definitely wasn't as strong as the first verse - I sorta panicked 
Ooo the bridge? I see what you mean.
The chorus was a biT more lax this time but it could've been punchier, I guess.
Thanksssssss siiiiisss  
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Welp...
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Member Since: 1/1/2014
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Noted and appreciated.
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Member Since: 1/13/2012
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Fair review, thanks. In my head I heard the first part as like an intro as the beat kicks in and then going into the first verse which takes about the first night together, like it's looking back on it. I failed it seems 
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1 good, 4 mixed.
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All the judges liking different parts of the songs  . I love that, actually.
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Wait, what?
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Member Since: 1/1/2014
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Yes I got hired!
lemme catch up, which reviews are posted?
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Member Since: 1/1/2014
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Wait Matty's reviews are really long this time slay!
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