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Originally posted by feelslikeadream
Let's look it up in the dictionary and it's definition number FORTY-THREE? Hmm, no wonder it didn't spring to mind when I read the song? And it's use in the line: "We dance in bed, until that fires beat" is awkward, whether the definition is clear or not.
And instead of coming in here with your nasty ass attitude and complaining about ONE part of my critique why don't you take some time to focus on your inept songwriting?
- Start/heart - easy, predictable rhyme.
- Swing/sing - even worse.
- What is even happening in this imagery? People are fighting and fighting and then you "begin to sing"?
- "Dear" and "deer" are used at the end of the verse because they make sense together? No, because you think you're being cute with your wordplay when this pun is actually inept and unrelated to the rest of the song?
- "Chasing for you" - FOR? does that make sense or are you forcing a syllable into your tortured rhythm?
- Need I go on?
You didn't get your score because of ONE phrase I didn't understand but because the entire song was unoriginal and poorly written. So don't come in here writing me an article about what a single word means when you have WAY more problems to be concerned about.
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Well it took four seconds to scroll down to find that definition but okay.
But don't call my writing inept, I am a great song writer and I know that. Don't try to force your opinions and start calling everything unoriginal and cliche. Do you even know what the hell a forced rhyme is? Can there even be such thing as a forced rhyme or are you just putting that in there for the sake of being over critical? Because you clearly have this rep as being "that tough judge" to impress.
I mean I could have written a simple song about monsters under my bed and a big scary beast. Would a cliche song been original enough for you?
One second you're saying somethings unoriginal and the next you're saying something is to random and doesn't go together. Like come on.
