[moijejoue]

I feel that I have a hard time distinguishing lyrics from poetry.

[Hugamari]

I have my first verse, hook, and chorus done I just need second verse and bridge.

[conatus]

Originally posted by moijejoue

I feel that I have a hard time distinguishing lyrics from poetry.

The meter is really off.

[conatus]

Nostalgic's chorus is good, but the verses sound like Facebook quotes.

[Stark]

I didn't volunteer,
to live life in fear.
So stop this play,
you ain't a puppeteer.

@ conatus.

[conatus]

Drag me.

[Temporal]

Originally posted by conatus

Nostalgic's chorus is good, but the verses sound like Facebook quotes.

The verses are pretty simple, that's true

[Stark]

That pre-chorus flows so GOOD. Slay myself.

[Buyonce1814]

Originally posted by moijejoue

What do you guys think of thisverse?


An utterance of ignorance
An overdose of pride
Results in inevitable belligerence
In which opposing souls collide

You're not the man I once knew
I'm no longer your Mona Lisa smile
Just a former image that's been chewed
Up and broken down by our own bile

Not completely sold on the bold tbh. "in inevitable" feels slightly awkward. I do quite like the first two lines

[moijejoue]

Originally posted by conatus

The meter is really off.

Can you give me a brief explanation of the meter?

I know it's supposed to be common sense but it seems to elude me.

Like is their a universal meter I must follow or do I adjust it and keep it consistent?

[conatus]

Originally posted by moijejoue

Can you give me a brief explanation of the meter?

I know it's supposed to be common sense but it seems to elude me.

Like is their a universal meter I must follow or do I adjust it and keep it consistent?

I'm terrible at explaining. Truthy, where you at?

[moijejoue]

Alright. There's always room for improvement.

[Truth Teller]

Sam, "peace" can be anything. It can be inner peace, world peace, peace after a fight, a peaceful scenery. So, be creative with it if you're currently stuck

[swiftie13]

This challenge is gonna give me a harder time than last week, I can already tell but that's good.

[Truth Teller]

moijejoue, your verse is good. I don't mind the meter, because the syllables are stressed correctly for the most part, so I can just sing it by putting more syllables in the beginning of each line and work out a bit of a messy, but accurate pace.

The main problem is "chewed", cause it's too simple to fit the rest of the advanced vocabulary.

[Temporal]

I didn't like my theme at first but I made it work

[swiftie13]

Waitttt... we choose one pair and I write a song about one of the two and my partner does the other one or do I write about one pair and my partner the other?

[moijejoue]

Originally posted by Truth Teller

moijejoue, your verse is good. I don't mind the meter, because the syllables are stressed correctly for the most part, so I can just sing it by putting more syllables in the beginning of each line and work out a bit of a messy, but accurate pace.

The main problem is "chewed", cause it's too simple to fit the rest of the advanced vocabulary.

Alright, but can I get a brief explanation about meters because it seems to be something I struggle with.

[Truth Teller]

Originally posted by swiftie13

This challenge is gonna give me a harder time than last week, I can already tell but that's good.

Have you and your partner picked a pair of opposites yet? You're the only duo that hasn't picked one of their 2 options, unless I missed it

[Truth Teller]

Originally posted by swiftie13

Waitttt... we choose one pair and I write a song about one of the two and my partner does the other one or do I write about one pair and my partner the other?

Yes