The chorus is very well-written and has a great flow rhythmically. It's very well-done. I really like the approach you took for the song's concept as well, I enjoyed the song's build as the verse slowly revealed the subject of the song. If I have a criticism, it's that the lines of the pre-chorus may be a little too long to smoothly transition from verse to chorus and the rhythm in the verse isn't as tight as the rest of the song. Excellent entry overall though
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Pretty tight overall, but the “I’ll be missing you” lines felt out of place rhythmically just inserted after the two 6-line parts of your chorus. Some language was too familiar (e.g. last line of pre-chorus).
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The chorus is so raw and filled with emotions. I had to keep together my composure ngl.
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ugh, the chorus was everything You really know how to write and structure a song, which is important and makes your entries very pleasant to read. There are no noticeable flaws in meter, rhythm or rhyming throughout the song, minus "me - history" All I can say as a shortcoming is that the verse and pre-chorus revisited the theme of your first entry, which I was afraid would happen, although Get To Heaven was good enough to get a sequel. I also felt that the verse and pre-chorus could have had some stronger lines to really push the song higher, but it's overall a great entry
I'm feeling pretty good about my song this week, despite my initial worries.
