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I had a whole response written out, but then I didn't know if I was placing proper emphasis on what was emphasized in Teenage Dream and deleted it.
I wasn't about to give out wrong advice and I was not trained in the art of songwriting.
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I came here tonight (2nd, 4th)
to get you out of my mind (2nd, 4th, 6th)
I’m gonna take what I find (2nd, 4th, 6th)
So open the box (2nd, 4th)
don’t need no key I’m unlocked (2nd, 4th, 6th)
And I won’t tell you to stop (2nd, 4th, 6th)
I don’t need to know where you’ve been (3rd, 5th, 7th)
All I need to know is you and (3rd, 5th, 7th)
no need for talking (2nd, 4th)
So don’t even tell me your name (3rd, 5th, 7th)
All I need to know is whose place (3rd, 5th, 7th)
And let’s get walking... (2nd, 4th)
*there's a very slight issue in "your name", cause when you say it, the stressing is supposed to be on "name" but the way she sings it makes the problem go away. And it's not that noticeable either, cause sometimes when you introduce yourself, you might say "so, I told you my name, now what is your name?" in a fun, little flirty way.
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Thanks for your comment, TT!  I was in love with my song at the start, but I lose it during the chorus and couldn't figure out what to do. The "Bod-dee-da-dee" thing was basically to fill space.  I'd love to finish the song one day though, because I feel like there's a lot of potential there! (not to toot my own horn)
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10. Earned It - #4 - posh
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Is this accurate? 
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Mess @ Beyonce having exactly 666 plays on my last fm, I'm not even kidding
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Originally posted by Hugamari
I had a whole response written out, but then I didn't know if I was placing proper emphasis on what was emphasized in Teenage Dream and deleted it.
I wasn't about to give out wrong advice and I was not trained in the art of songwriting.
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ffffff the backfire 
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Yas your example was way better than what I was trying to do.
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Originally posted by posh
Thanks for your comment, TT! I was in love with my song at the start, but I lose it during the chorus and couldn't figure out what to do. The "Bod-dee-da-dee" thing was basically to fill space. I'd love to finish the song one day though, because I feel like there's a lot of potential there! (not to toot my own horn)
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Yes posh, you're in TT's Top 10. 
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Quote:
Originally posted by posh
Thanks for your comment, TT! I was in love with my song at the start, but I lose it during the chorus and couldn't figure out what to do. The "Bod-dee-da-dee" thing was basically to fill space. I'd love to finish the song one day though, because I feel like there's a lot of potential there! (not to toot my own horn)
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yes
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Originally posted by posh
Thanks for your comment, TT! I was in love with my song at the start, but I lose it during the chorus and couldn't figure out what to do. The "Bod-dee-da-dee" thing was basically to fill space. I'd love to finish the song one day though, because I feel like there's a lot of potential there! (not to toot my own horn)
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Yes, it is. 
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
I came here tonight (2nd, 4th)
to get you out of my mind (2nd, 4th, 6th)
I’m gonna take what I find (2nd, 4th, 6th)
So open the box (2nd, 4th)
don’t need no key I’m unlocked (2nd, 4th, 6th)
And I won’t tell you to stop (2nd, 4th, 6th)
I don’t need to know where you’ve been (3rd, 5th, 7th)
All I need to know is you and (3rd, 5th, 7th)
no need for talking (2nd, 4th)
So don’t even tell me your name (3rd, 5th, 7th)
All I need to know is whose place (3rd, 5th, 7th)
And let’s get walking... (2nd, 4th)
*there's a very slight issue in "your name", cause when you say it, the stressing is supposed to be on "name" but the way she sings it makes the problem go away. And it's not that noticeable either, cause sometimes when you introduce yourself, you might say "so, I told you my name, now what is your name?" in a fun, little flirty way.
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I still don't get it, TT nnnn
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
I came here tonight (2nd, 4th)
to get you out of my mind (2nd, 4th, 6th)
I’m gonna take what I find (2nd, 4th, 6th)
So open the box (2nd, 4th)
don’t need no key I’m unlocked (2nd, 4th, 6th)
And I won’t tell you to stop (2nd, 4th, 6th)
I don’t need to know where you’ve been (3rd, 5th, 7th)
All I need to know is you and (3rd, 5th, 7th)
no need for talking (2nd, 4th)
So don’t even tell me your name (3rd, 5th, 7th)
All I need to know is whose place (3rd, 5th, 7th)
And let’s get walking... (2nd, 4th)
*there's a very slight issue in "your name", cause when you say it, the stressing is supposed to be on "name" but the way she sings it makes the problem go away. And it's not that noticeable either, cause sometimes when you introduce yourself, you might say "so, I told you my name, now what is your name?" in a fun, little flirty way.
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Nnnnn thank you 
The only thing I don't get is "unlocked" like shouldn't only the second syllable count?
I definitely understand it a bit more but it's gonna take a while for me to get used to writing like that  I don't even know how to edit my song's stressing/meter without completely rewriting lines.
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Wait at FeFe LASHING Posh but TT putting him in his Top 10 
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
I came here tonight (2nd, 4th)
to get you out of my mind (2nd, 4th, 6th)
I’m gonna take what I find (2nd, 4th, 6th)
So open the box (2nd, 4th)
don’t need no key I’m unlocked (2nd, 4th, 6th)
And I won’t tell you to stop (2nd, 4th, 6th)
I don’t need to know where you’ve been (3rd, 5th, 7th)
All I need to know is you and (3rd, 5th, 7th)
no need for talking (2nd, 4th)
So don’t even tell me your name (3rd, 5th, 7th)
All I need to know is whose place (3rd, 5th, 7th)
And let’s get walking... (2nd, 4th)
*there's a very slight issue in "your name", cause when you say it, the stressing is supposed to be on "name" but the way she sings it makes the problem go away. And it's not that noticeable either, cause sometimes when you introduce yourself, you might say "so, I told you my name, now what is your name?" in a fun, little flirty way.
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When songwriting becomes over complicated and loses its fun.
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I hate when you think you understand something and then 2 secs later you're still a dumb ass hoe
dd let me stick to my Bjork-inspired poems
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I really don't understand meter and stressing either 
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I still don't get it, TT nnnn
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These have correct stressing, each in their own way
I am Truth Teller and I bought Lotus
I am Truth Teller and I bought Lotus
I am Truth Teller and I bought Lorus
It depends on what you want to emphasize and how you want yourself to sound.
This is wrong stressing :
I am Truth Tell er and I bought Lo tus
"teller" and "lotus" are wrong and the "and" doesn't need to be emphasized in any way
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Originally posted by dwuw
I still don't get it, TT nnnn
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We should get him to do it for Mulher Melancia's iconic smash hit Velocidade 6
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Originally posted by keshaspearsxo
When songwriting becomes over complicated and loses its fun.
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Making sure songwriting is executed properly /= Losing fun
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
These have correct stressing, each in their own way
I am Truth Teller and I bought Lotus
I am Truth Teller and I bought Lotus
I am Truth Teller and I bought Lorus
It depends on what you want to emphasize and how you want yourself to sound.
This is wrong stressing :
I am Truth Teller and I bought Lotus
"teller" and "lotus" are wrong and the "and" doesn't need to be emphasized in any way
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nn The Dress 2.0, don't we all hear different things?
To me, it's: Truth Tell er
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Originally posted by keshaspearsxo
When songwriting becomes over complicated and loses its fun.
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When explaining something to someone who asked becomes annoying because someone thought it was necessary to shade it after I took 10 minutes to write it.
You have naturally good stressing, so you never needed to worry about counting syllabs in your head and neither did I, so call us lucky if you will. But some people don't have it naturally and they can learn it. I wanna help. Keep it quiet and cute while I do.
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