[Blue.]

Originally posted by Truth Teller

Blame It On The Rain (Blue.) - The formatting was a bit confusing, so please label the parts of your song next time. I like the imagery and mood best. Don’t like the confusion over precipitation; blame it on the ‘rain,’ but it’s a cold, cold winter out? Sounds like it’d be snow then. And then you say “the sleet falls.” This is weird.

Well, not in every single country it snows you know? In my country, it doesn't and the most we get is sleet among the rain ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

[Truth Teller]

Originally posted by TheCheetahwings

Well, the song was supposed to have heavy sarcasm, so when I say "I'm So insulted" it's not supposed to be literal. (Same with "How will my life ever go on?" which is supposed to be ott and clearly not serious). Clearly the sarcasm didn't read very well though . Thanks for the feedback.

The sarcasm in "how will my life go on?" was obvious and read very well and clear.

The sarcasm in the other phrases was not however. I think what would have worked better is if you made a very sarcastic chorus and then kept the other parts literal or the other way around, cause if you mix sarcasm with the things you actually want to say, it becomes very confusing unless you have enough hyperbolic statements like "how will my life go on" to help draw the line

[Jezang Looz]

Originally posted by Truth Teller

The syllabes are miscounted. I'm not referring to the total number of them, I'm referring to where you put your stressing.

Prayed for so long to find someone like you (stressing on 1st, 4th, 7th and 10th syllab)
I never gave up even though you were a fool (stressing on 2nd, 5th, 8th and 12th syllab)
Still I moved on hoping you’d come back through (stressing on 1st, 4th, 5th and 10th syllab)
But the pain is strong I can see you’re hurting too (stressing on 3rd, 5th, 8th, 12th syllab)

I tried to read it in 3 different ways, 3 different paces and the syllabes didn't work. It's not the main problem of the song and I only took off 0.2 or sth for it.

Oh you meant the stress syllables, yeah I didn't try to work on that this song. This style was something different than I'm used to but I'll keep that in mind it was a fun challenge though and good feedback as always- thank you!

[Truth Teller]

Originally posted by Blue.

Well, not in every single country it snows you know? In my country, it doesn't and the most we get is sleet among the rain ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

Fefe's reviews are life, but he was kinda wrong for that, ngl

[Hugamari]

Originally posted by dwuw

1989 is what killed all faith I had left after BEYONCE. If that's what "pop perfection" these days is, then it's no wonder the older generation thinks music these days is literal ****.

Originally posted by Truth Teller

Legend X is allegedly coming in Q4, but I doubt she'll do it for you

I have a lot of respect for Christina, because unlike a lot of pop artists, I feel she does have genuine respect for art and is heavily involved in her craft, but she never makes a huge deal about how "artistic" she is, like some artists.

Originally posted by ■YoungCalifornia■

Are you a producer? What do you mean by "don't have instrumentals with them"?

I do produce sometimes, but usually I write lyrics without instrumentals, and vice versa. One of the favorite songs I've written, "A Love That Was Once Ours", can't be registered, as I don't have an instrumental to it, and part of registering is putting in how long the song is. I can't do that unless I have an actual recording of the song or whatever.

[Truth Teller]

Originally posted by Jezang Looz

Oh you meant the stress syllables, yeah I didn't try to work on that this song. This style was something different than I'm used to but I'll keep that in mind it was a fun challenge though and good feedback as always- thank you!

No problem. I'm still rooting for you to make it through and I didn't drag you with my score so it could still happen But maybe there'll be a comeback round after round 4, like the initial plan was, so that's still a possibility....

[Jezang Looz]

Originally posted by Truth Teller

No problem. I'm still rooting for you to make it through and I didn't drag you with my score so it could still happen But maybe there'll be a comeback round after round 4, like the initial plan was, so that's still a possibility....

This is me like

But there are plenty of other good contestants so it's alright. Maybe my personality can carry me through BB next season since songwriting ain't for me

For my first visit in the game section on ATRL this was/still is fun. I wish I came in here sooner

[UFO]

I thought flow and rhythm were the pits, but then came along stress and meter

[Stark]

[Truth Teller]

Originally posted by Jezang Looz

This is me like

But there are plenty of other good contestants so it's alright. Maybe my personality can carry me through BB next season since songwriting ain't for me

For my first visit in the game section on ATRL this was/still is fun. I wish I came in here sooner

You had never been in the Games section before PH7? The impact

[Jezang Looz]

We all need somebody to lean on
Whoa oh oh oh ooo oh

[Stark]

I'm sure that Mia Flopina girl isn't pop perfection

[Hugamari]

Originally posted by Jezang Looz

This is me like

But there are plenty of other good contestants so it's alright. Maybe my personality can carry me through BB next season since songwriting ain't for me

For my first visit in the game section on ATRL this was/still is fun. I wish I came in here sooner

I've been perched in the Games section since my first month on ATRL, when I competed in Top Member. I didn't get far, but I really enjoyed the experience and I decided to stay here and make it my home.

Originally posted by EuphorianSea

I thought flow and rhythm were the pits, but then came along stress and meter

This will sound really arrogant to me, but I'm glad I was born with the natural talent for this ****, because lord knows I wouldn't be able to learn it.

[Stark]

Originally posted by Jezang Looz

We all need somebody to lean on
Whoa oh oh oh ooo oh

Stan for my jam

[Jezang Looz]

Originally posted by Truth Teller

You had never been in the Games section before PH7? The impact

Nope You and GotSkill were like, you should enter this!

The game section seemed to move too fast for me but it's pretty chill here.

[Hugamari]

Originally posted by dwuw

I'm sure that Mia Flopina girl isn't pop perfection

Well she's not. Mostly because she's closer to dance than pop.

[Jezang Looz]

Originally posted by dwuw

Stan for my jam

This song came on my Pandora last night and I thought of you

I was actually gonna make Lean On my status too but I didn't wanna be accused of copying

[conatus]

I'd never been in the Games section before PH7 either.

[TheCheetahwings]

Originally posted by Truth Teller

The sarcasm in "how will my life go on?" was obvious and read very well and clear.

The sarcasm in the other phrases was not however. I think what would have worked better is if you made a very sarcastic chorus and then kept the other parts literal or the other way around, cause if you mix sarcasm with the things you actually want to say, it becomes very confusing unless you have enough hyperbolic statements like "how will my life go on" to help draw the line

Fair enough Next time (If there's a next time )) I'll definitely work harder on pace/rhyming/getting the message of the song across

[8thPrince]

Yes at my metaphor being liked