There's a reason why I said hidden, a meaning, the words he never actually spoke, were hidden and therefore hit me like hail, but maybe I was being a bit too creative, okay then.
There's a reason why I said hidden, a meaning, the words he never actually spoke, were hidden and therefore hit me like hail, but maybe I was being a bit too creative, okay then.
B) eyes' is plural so ‘pit’ should be too
I'll give you that
C)and the rhyming was mostly forced.
I don't think it was so I'll let you be.
Hehe the hidden part was definitely creative! I did mention that to you as well
The Monster (Nait Phoenix) - The rhythm was tight and the chorus in the recorded track slayed me a bit. Some of the language was too ordinary or awkward; for example, something can’t be “laced without” something.
something can definitely be "laced without" something… I'm saying that what is normally on the object is not on there now… like a martini laced with a salt rim can be a martini laced without a salt rim…
