[Stark]

Euphoria is that your song? Slay!

[conatus]

I feel like if I nail the concept for IBMY it could be the best song I've ever written. But it's just getting it right that is proving impossible.

[ForeverNow90]

The alien line is actually flawless.

It lowkey reminds me of "But he gotta eat the booty like groceries"... So unexpected, yet it just somehow works

[UFO]

Originally posted by JustLuke

So, vine is fine right? If I just edit the words before that, it wont sound so bad?

Cause I do like the word vine as that's what I feel like I'm caught in, which is why I just edited that line, so hopefully vine fits in better now

Yeah, maybe you could show parallels between the story and "vine" like "our love is twisted like a vine" idk sis

[Stark]

@conatus, can you give me some feedback? Since you wrote a religious song and ended 2nd

[conatus]

Originally posted by dwuw

@conatus, can you give me some feedback? Since you wrote a religious song and ended 2nd

Yes, lesser, I will help.

Drop me a PM. Can you give some feedback on my songs after, too?

[conatus]

Just realised I use one line that's pretty much the same in both songs. My Lana Del Rey era is upon us.

[Lukey]

Originally posted by EuphorianSea

Yeah, maybe you could show parallels between the story and "vine" like "our love is twisted like a vine" idk sis

Well the line I have now is: I'm caught up in your twisted vine

I think it flows better

[Temporal]

Originally posted by conatus

Hope Hunter and Euphy can help a henny out.

Do you mean Hunter13 or me because my actual name is Hunter?

[Pecinta Mariah]

the amount of hyperbole in my song

[conatus]

Originally posted by ClarksonSlays

Do you mean Hunter13 or me because my actual name is Hunter?

You.

[Stark]

Yes

[UFO]

Originally posted by conatus

Just realised I use one line that's pretty much the same in both songs. My Lana Del Rey era is upon us.

Hi there Queen of Saigon/Coney Island/Disaster

[Stark]

This is really the Begin Again/Blank Space to my WANEGBT/SIO.

[Hugamari]

I really need to NOT write a sexual song next round, though.

Last time I participated as a contestant, all my songs were about relationships and it caught up with me at the end.

[Buyonce1814]

Originally posted by conatus

Just realised I use one line that's pretty much the same in both songs. My Lana Del Rey era is upon us.

I've only just got into Lana

[Lukey]

Ugh, starting to hate my song now thanks to you guys posting your beautiful lyrics

[UFO]

Wait connor sis... the iceberg line, my subconscious impact on the masses

[Temporal]

Originally posted by conatus

You.

You know me so well.

[Stark]

I got my red dress on tonight
Dancing in the dark in the pale moonlight
Done my hair up real big beauty queen style
High heels off, I'm feeling alive

Oh, my God, I feel it in the air
Telephone wires above are sizzling like a snare
Honey, I'm on fire, I feel it everywhere
Nothing scares me anymore