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3. Prime: Oh my god the vocals in the verses  And the instrumental in the bridge
The chorus feels a bit overproduced, tho.
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2. Catch - 9.75
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Wait, did I miss an album swap? 
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Originally posted by posh
Sail On: Yas, this is a much better approach to showing her soft side. Those layered guitars and percussion - that's what I want to hear! It's an indistinct song (in a good way), and I love all the levels that it reaches. This song has a lot of bliss to it, especially towards the end, and acts as the perfect album closer.
Overall: This is the future of pop - well, not really the future, more like the low-key present day pop. It's incredible on both the lyrical and production front. All of the songs are unique and each showcase how talented Ryn is. I'll be looking out for more work from her, for sure!
Song ranking: Promises > Sail On > OctaHate > Stay Low
Thanks for the suggestion, Jorge! I really enjoyed this EP!! 
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Glad you liked it! 
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That's just the tip of the iceberg, I'll do whatever it takes, to change
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Originally posted by MattyTacos
Wait, did I miss an album swap? |
You missed EVERYTHING.
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Originally posted by MattyTacos
Wait, did I miss an album swap? |
Yeah, but don't worry, it's only EPs to pass time until results. After results, I'm going to be starting album swap sign ups that will last for a few days, so nobody can feel left out unless they just don't come in the thread at all.
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Originally posted by dwuw
3. Prime: Oh my god the vocals in the verses And the instrumental in the bridge
The chorus feels a bit overproduced, tho.
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2. Catch - 9.75
3. Prime - 9 |
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Tumor is next omg
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Originally posted by EuphorianSea
You missed EVERYTHING.
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Tragic. I was sleeping
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it won't be long, I have to stay awake
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Omg I'm scared 
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Tragic. I was sleeping
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I could say something very shady, but I won't.
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Post the damn reviews already, I want to know why Matty didn't like my song.
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No one ever listens to my suggested albums/EPs.  I'm 0 for 2.
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Originally posted by EuphorianSea
I could say something very shady, but I won't.
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You say shady stuff all the time. What's the difference now?
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Originally posted by conatus
Post the damn reviews already, I want to know why Matty didn't like my song.
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I was actually intending to post them at 12 50, so be glad I'm feeling generous
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4. Tumor: This song is different from the other 3 tracks  The chorus is flawless, those high notes...
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2. Catch - 9.75
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Originally posted by posh
No one ever listens to my suggested albums/EPs. I'm 0 for 2. |
I listened to Piece By Piece for you
If you gave me another album I'd listen 
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 ReviewsA Hug : I think you had a good concept idea; except some lines felt awkward to me. And the whole idea felt a little unclear.
Baby We’re Through : I liked the contrast between how you care for the guy and how much he hurts you in the verse. The chorus honestly didn’t really do much for me. And I felt like you could’ve done much better with said chorus.
Beep Beep : This was such a great rap. I was lowkey bopping the whole time. But the beep beep lyric made me cringe just a bit.
Box : The first verse was a bit shaky, the rhyming was just fine but the flow felt a little off. But then pre-chorus and chorus punches in, both which were amazingly well written. Though I wasn’t a fan of the war line in the chorus but that’s just me.
Break A String : I feel like this had a lot of potential. I thought the first verse was very strong, but didn’t really understand or like the second verse. I also felt like the chorus ended so abrupt.
Breaking : I thought that the first half of the chorus was a bop but the rest of the song was really weak. Also the first verse sounds too similar to Britney’s Hold It Against Me.
Boy Blue : I really liked the first verse, but I thought a couple lines in the pre-chorus were messy. The chorus was good but didn’t pack a final punch.
Breath : The verse was very beautifully written, it was captivating and told a great story. Though, I was a bit let down with the chorus since it honestly felt a little flat, I felt like you could’ve added more to deliver that final punch.
Can’t Let You Go : I really like the first half of the first verse but I feel like it kinda goes downhill for the rest of the verse. But, luckily the chorus brought me back a little bit.
Castle Of Dreams : I didn’t really like the first verse but it had some good lines. The chorus was a step up, but I prefer the second half.
Ceiling Of Fate : I wasn’t feeling the first half of the verse honestly, but after the ceiling of fate line it flowed a lot better. Plus the chorus was fantastically written and so moving.
Clouds : This was such a cute song! It may not have served a final punch but I thought it was very well written and it was lowkey uplifting. The chorus kinda reminds me of Kelly’s Breakaway.
Collide : I didn’t really like a couple lines in the first verse. But overall this is actually a cute bop, it gives me a EDM tea.
Dancing Stripper - The rhymes are really awkward and the flow doesn't really work.
Deadly Crime : This was cute. I really liked the first verse, I preferred it to the chorus. I felt like you could’ve gone in more in the chorus.
Dear God : You have a strong first verse, but I don’t think the rest of the song holds up to it.
Down For The Count : I loved the third half of the first verse! It was so well written and I got my life. Wasn’t a huge fan of the first half of the chorus though, but the second half was a bop.
Empty Thoughts : I liked the cards referencing about fate in the first verse, but the rest of it felt very messy and disorientated. The chorus had a somewhat decent start (even though it felt more like a verse) but it didn’t have the final punch needed.
Get To Heaven : Great imagery in the first verse, probably my favorite part of the song. Not a huge fan of the chorus, I felt like it could’ve really packed a bigger punch you know? It just felt like it was missing something.
Good Girl : I thought this was a cute bop, but your explanation did make me like the song a little more.
Half Of Me : I liked the first half of the verse a little more than the second, but I didn’t like the first line.
Holy Swords : I really loved the first verse! I thought the neck line was awkward, but I loved the heart line. The chorus wasn’t as strong as the first verse, but it’s only cause the first verse really blew me away.
I Almost Do : I think you had a good idea/concept on what you wanted to write in your song but I don’t think it translated very well onto the page.
I Need You Tonight : This song kinda reminds me of I Wish You Would in a way. I didn’t really like much of the first verse, the pre-chorus and chorus were much better but the first verse pulled the song down some.
Iggy Fantastic : This song is amazing. It’s so fun and such a cute bop. Good job!
Innocence : This was such a beautiful song. I loved the part in the verse about wanting to live again. The chorus is very cute but you could’ve punched harder.
Into The Crowd : I liked the concept you had with this song but some of the lyrics felt really awkward.
Its My Life : This song was serving me a good Mean Girls/Clueless/Fierce Chick Film movie tea and I was loving it. I hope you deliver more bops like this! The pre-chorus felt like you cut off a couple lines (you probably didn’t but that’s how it felt to me). But I liked the rest.
Journal : This song is really great! I thought the first verse was pretty decent but the chorus definitely is miles better and is well written.
Kingdom : The first verse is fire but I felt as if the chorus fell flat.
Like I Care : The first verse had some dodgy lines for me honestly. The pre-chorus was great. I wasn’t really feeling the first half of the chorus, and the die line didn’t really make sense and felt like a forced rhyme.
Little Birds : You have some great poetic lyrics and a great message/concept.
Melting Point : I think you had a good concept idea, just the whole idea of “melting point” was very awkwardly phrased and used.
Poison Ivy League : This song was so cute! Not usually a fan of musical/showtunes but I won’t lie, I really enjoyed this. Plus I laughed a couple times like at the sass/gasp line.
Ready For The Curtains : I thought you had a nice concept idea but the song didn’t really do anything for me.
Repeater : The first verse was good. The chorus was a bop though. I can’t tell if the pet your peter line is tragic or amazing.
Run : I really like your concept. The song kind of reminds me of Skyscraper for some reason.
Sea Of Lies : This song kinda sounds like it’d be off of Tinashe’s debut album. The verse was decent but the chorus was a step up.
Silver : The first verse was great. I liked the chorus up until the second half where it kinda falls apart for me.
Sing Of You : This is so beautifully written. Your vocabulary is amazing too. I don't have any complaints so I'll leave it at that.
Snapchat Remix (feat. FKA Dancehall) : This was a good joke song. I chuckled a few times I won’t lie. The rhymes were awkward at a couple parts.
Song Of Misery : I really liked where you were going with this song but I think it fell flat at certain points.
Star Lord : I thought your song idea was very cute. But you didn’t really have a rhyme scheme and for half the chorus it felt like you were just trying to find words that sticked.
Stillness : I really liked the first verse but I felt the chorus was a bit anti-climatic.
Take Off With Me : This had a decent concept but it felt it has been done a bunch of times before so I wasn’t really impressed by this.
The Best We’ll Ever Have : I think you had a good concept but some of the lyrics were awkwardly written, but it got the point across and was a cute song.
The Prayer : This reminds me of Lana! In a good way. And of course it probably should since you used a instrumental of hers to inspire you.
The Spotlight : This song was good, but it honestly didn’t have that final punch to really make me stan for it.
this. : This kinda reminded me of a E=MC2 bop. I cringed at a couple lyrics like, balling your heart like paper line but I did like the chorus a lot better.
Under Our Tree : This song was cute! It sounds like something that would be on a early Mariah album from the 90s.
We Live Long : This is actually a really good bop. It kinda reminds me of something Mariah would put on E=MC2 and later release it as a single.
When The Morning Comes : I actually really liked this. It was well written and very sweet.
White Flower / Black Flower : Your imagery skills are really great! I was impressed by your song. I like the contrast between the white flower and the black, but the shift felt kind of rushed so that the chorus could continue on.
Wonder Veins : This was so well written and I really liked the idea you created behind this song. Though, I do think wonder veins is an iffy title for the song and sounds awkward.
You Don’t Know Bitch - This doesn’t really have a flow to it, I mean I did like your concept but it’s hard to get into the song without a specific flow - which all rap songs need.
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I listened to Let's Not Be Alone Tonight, posh.
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Originally posted by MattyTacos
You say shady stuff all the time. What's the difference now?
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The shade was about you sleeping and I didn't know which direction to take it, so I flunked out cause you're not worth it.
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