[Achilles.]

I really don't think I've seen a contestant be able to recount tales of their own life, with no smoke and mirrors in the form of fancy language, in a way that is done so effectively quite like you in any season I've played or judged.

This praise.

I think you'd be quite a natural at Country songwriting

When I started writing at 17, I was really torn between whether I'd want to be a country or pop artist. But eventually I realized that I'd definitely be pop--my personality, my ideas and concepts and style wouldn't work in the country industry / scene. I'd still want to do a country album someday, and it would be songs like this one.

[Aurora]

Sam's Comments

01. swiftie13 – Consuelo
I really liked this and found it quite touching. It was well written and effectively translated the conflicting emotions of love and hesitance and desire and fear (of disappointment).

02. ughgabriel – ram
(didn't read the description for this yet) I like the sophisticated level of language you've been using in your songs since returning to the competition, it makes you think about things a bit more. I especally loved the second part of the pre-chorus, that jumped out at me as a standout (although the language is more simple).

03. MattyTacos – Father
I like the verses and bridge because they're honest and tell a new piece of the story. That's something I've noticed (although it seems kind of obvious in hindsight) that it's harder to make a recurring chorus/pre-chorus in storytelling songs without it seeming to stunt the natural progression of the song, unless you change the lyrics around a bit. The pre-chorus was good but felt a bit familiar, (can't use a bandage to fix this mistake / bandaids can't fix bullet holes), the dreaming/awake comparison etc. and the chorus was OK, I loved the lean on/weights on me comparison there.

04. ClarksonSlays – Siren Song
OK points for appealing to both me and GotSkill with the song title/cover art. Very Siren Song (GotSkill) and Set Sail (me). Now let me stop being self indulgent. It's a sound concept and you've executed it pretty well, that doesn't seem to be an issue for you any more (if it ever was). But there are still choices I question. The post-chorus just seems weird to me, I like the idea, but, idk, there's just something creepy about referring to skin/bones/(especially) lips in this way.

05. UFO – Bloody Hands (Nightmare)
Let me add this to the list of songs with a second title in brackets for the Platinum Grammys This was an interesting read, there were a few things I didn't "get" straight away which hopefully I'll pick up on when I review it later (the blind best friend?) I think the chorus had some good ideas that could have been phrased better, that might be the case for the verses too.

06. Moonchild – Sorcery
I challenge you to write a song without a single moon reference next week (if you're still here, which there's a big chance you will be). It's getting a bit predictable. Actually, I hate to say it, but a lot of this song was predictable, from the subject matter to the language you used (I've seen these specific word choices – moonlight, star-crossed, tryst, spellbound – in one or more of your previous songs, I swear). It was a beautiful read and your imagery and flow and all of that is on point, but you're starting to fall into a kind of one-trick pony zone for me and I'd just like to see something vastly different.

07. TheCheetahwings – Baby Blue
Hello, 8thPrince. Love the quoted song lyrics! This read very nicely and it had a good non-familiar concept which is always nice to see in these time-pressure situations. Like I said about Matty's song, it's harder to have a locked in pre-chorus/chorus in a storytelling song, and that's what you've avoided with the alternate prechoruses and final chorus. I think in a storytelling song it's somewhat not a must.

08. Achilles. – Roots Grow Deeper
I absolutely loved this. You are probably the most well-rounded storytelling writer in this competition and I love it. Only things I'd suggest is opening the song with "How" instead of "Well", it reads nicer, and the facial features lyric in the bridge seems forced to rhyme with teachers. Otherwise well done.

[Aurora]

nn poor swiftie, I started out trying to be all short and sweet and then I basically wrote full-length comments for most of the others.

[Temporal]

Thankz u twoz

[TheCheetahwings]

Hello, 8thPrince. Love the quoted song lyrics! This read very nicely and it had a good non-familiar concept which is always nice to see in these time-pressure situations. Like I said about Matty's song, it's harder to have a locked in pre-chorus/chorus in a storytelling song, and that's what you've avoided with the alternate prechoruses and final chorus. I think in a storytelling song it's somewhat not a must.

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

[Achilles.]

Y'all should visit my BO15 while waiting for Meow and Skill to comment.

[Jackson]

Sent my comments!

[Moonchild]

Thank you for your comments so far, lovesong, Huga and (kinda) Sam! me @ Sam dragging it for filth, though.

[Moonchild]

I completely understand the one-tricky pony concerns, but the moon references in my songs are usually only a word or two that aren't essential to the meaning of the songs. I thought it'd be cute to have a recurring motif for an EP at the end or w/e. "Star-crossed" and "tryst" were meant as direct references to "Starcrossed," but I clearly didn't pull that off well if it comes across as unoriginal.

I'll abandon it if I make it to next round, though!

[UFO]

Yay, thanks for the comments! This week I tried to tell a biT of a story so I'm happy that came through somewhat. The message I tried to incorporate can be quite hard to "get" at first glance but it should start to make sense. It's basically about someone feeling great remorse/guilt for their friend's suicide as if they were responsible for it. Hence why I used the metaphor of "bloody hands" The "nightmare" aspect of it is pure denial of the present. I didn't want to include the explanation because I thought it'd be more interesting to have y'all interpret it in your own way

I think my favourite line would have to be either "I see you now, broken in half like a mirror that won't reflect" or "The ceiling fell on your shoulders, my heart in one of your hands, you always thought of me even when things didn't go as planned".

[swiftie13]

Thanks for the comments! Nothing bad so far really And I see you, Lynx. Giving me a short review because I'm 5'0. I see right through your short joke! Heightist

[Achilles.]

The fact that Skill's comments are sitting in Lynx's inbox and neither of them are posting them.




Is this the first time Meow has been the last judge?

[Temporal]

I'ma be real, I'm very scared about the results this week

[Aurora]

I have both GotSkill and Meowster comments. Meowster was busy this week. Will post when I get home in about 2 hrs if they don't post themselves by then

[Temporal]

Originally posted by Lynx

I have both GotSkill and Meowster comments. Meowster was busy this week. Will post when I get home in about 2 hrs if they don't post themselves by then

Slay! So results tomorrow?

[ughgabriel]

Originally posted by ClarksonSlays

Slay! So results tomorrow?

I don't think so. Lynx/Sam hasn't posted his full comments. He said the ones that he posted were only a "sneak peek" of the final comments. Maybe on Monday we'll get the results

[ceremonials]

Haven't been here in forever. Who is still in?

[Temporal]

Originally posted by ceremonials

Haven't been here in forever. Who is still in?

your mom

[Achilles.]

Originally posted by ceremonials

Haven't been here in forever. Who is still in?

Me
Moon
Clarkson
swiftie
gabriel
UFO / Euphorian
Cheetah
Mr. Tacos

[Moonchild]

Originally posted by Lynx

I have both GotSkill and Meowster comments. Meowster was busy this week. Will post when I get home in about 2 hrs if they don't post themselves by then