Like I Care: I like this but it sounds like a poem and could use more precise meter / rhyme scheme. Also I laughed way too hard at the first two lines of your chorus and I’m guessing that wasn’t your intention.
Little Birds: This is so cute and it takes a lot for me to like a happy song so great great job! You brought enough of your own ideas to the table to keep it interesting but you had familiar concepts that made the message clear.
Melting Point: I’m confused by your verse rhyme scheme (AABBCCCDD?). Anyhow I do a similar thing to this with some of my songs where I take something academia-related and try to bring it back to Earth and tie emotion to it. I just feel like the way you talked about the melting point was kinda weird.
Poison Ivy League: I have a feeling I’m going to be in the minority but I lowkey love this and I could totally hear it in my head. It’s also pretty hilarious. It fits the genre well and everything made sense.
Ready for the Curtains: Please don’t give song descriptions when it’s not unclear, I like to think contestants have faith in my ability to read. Anyhow I feel like there too many lines without much substance. If you’re going to include a line, make sure it counts.
Repeater: Cool idea but it isn’t executed very well. For instance “pet your peter peter” just comes off as a little strange.
Run : This is gonna sound kind of ridiculous but this emphasis on running in songs is kind of overdone. Off the top of my head I can name three songs with Run, Run, Run as the title, which is what is functioning as the central part of your chorus. Try to do something you haven’t seen done many times before.
Sea of Lies: This is really lacking any oomph or edge to it. Not saying you need to be edgy but it just feels very ho-hum. See what you can do to spice it up a little.
Silver: Syllable count in the verse is really confusing but there are some lines I like.
Sing of You: Very successful imaginative lines, they sound delicious and make sense, I just want you to watch your meter but I feel a lot of potential in you. (Reminds me of my own lyrics but better hihihi.)
Snapchat Remix: I know this was a joke… but I didn’t laugh.
Song of Misery: I’d love to have you break this down line by line and explaining what everything means because everything feels rather disconnected. Who is the victim here? I’m really lost.
Star Lord: I’m without words.
Stillness: I have a feeling this is going to be the unpopular opinion from judges but despite the curtness I think this is cute. I would definitely want to see where you took this if you were to continue it.
Take Off with Me: The longest word in your entire 12-line chorus is five letters long, and while I’m not saying you need to be dishing out SAT words with each stanza, I could’ve used a little more substance. This bored me.
The Best We’ll Ever Have: I think this is really really cool especially the demons maybe line. You got really creative and you weren’t afraid to make the song’s circumstances complicated and messy. I just wish you would have paid more attention to meter and rhyme scheme.
The Prayer: The hunting metaphor is executed weirdly and it feels like three different songs stitched together.
The Spotlight: Meter is confusing me and I think you had a little too much rhyming and not enough content. Also it’s a tad trite.
this.: Something about the phrase “this relationship” feels very out of place in lyrics and is very off-putting. I’m also confused by your verse rhyme scheme.
Under the Tree: I love how personal it feels but I don’t like parts like the prechorus where it feels like you’re just filling space with lines that could be from any song.
We Live Long: Definitely stands out from the crowd but I want you to make sure all your lines make sense and aren’t just filler and/or for the rhyme.
When the Morning Comes: This was kinda cutesy but it was also kinda basic. I did like it but parts like rhyming “don’t cry” with “just close your eyes” is going past the verge of too simple for me. I liked the photograph part. I feel like this is Hugamari.
White Flower / Black Flower: This really feels like a poem, songs have more clear and exact meter, but I like the places this song was going.
Wonder Vein: Other judges might drag you for being enigmatic but I think that this really, really works! Although I could derive the meaning just from reading it this was an instance where a description is definitely okay.
You Don’t Know Me: ...what is this? I’m honestly just a tad bewildered. I don’t really know what to say to be honest, maybe just make sure you have a semi-proper rhyme scheme even in a rap?[/
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I'm so glad that the story and melody was clear!
