I haven't written a new song in months. I have plenty of ideas but no free time to really do anything!
However my friend who's quite a bit older than me is going through a divorce after finally deciding not to accept her husband's cheating ways and she was a wonderful wife and an incredible woman so it inspired a little song idea.
Its very rough so would love some feedback!
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The Mother of His Three Kids:
She's got stretch marks on her body from where she gave birth to three beautiful kids
And she's got wrinkles under her eyes that tell the story of sleepless nights
A good mother and a good wife
For better or for worse, till death do us part
He said he would never break her heart
CHORUS:
He made a vow to the love of his life
But he threw it all away with a stranger last night
The woman he gave a ring, gave him everything
With all of her heart she has loved him
Now he's taking the walk of shame
For a girl who doesn't even have a name
And its so so sad that he would do that
To the mother of his three kids
A I said its very rough, spent about 20 minutes on it or something.
Here it is So far, I've gotten 10 positive reviews and none that are negative of this song from friends and family. But I think they're tryna be too nice. I hate my voice. Remember, it's an URBAN RAP song.
Here it is So far, I've gotten 10 positive reviews and none that are negative of this song from friends and family. But I think they're tryna be too nice. I hate my voice. Remember, it's an URBAN RAP song.
For you to not answer the question... the song is nice, only main suggestion is the vocals need to be mixed louder. They sound drowned by the production, but once its remastered I could actually hear this playing on the radio.
Very nice work. I don't wanna sound vapid but I'm mainly interested in commercial music (I'm trying to get in the music business) so yeah this definitely has commercial appeal. But answer the question lol... I'm guessing you're the singer?
Your voice is fine but the mixer needs to make it louder.
For you to not answer the question... the song is nice, only main suggestion is the vocals need to be mixed louder. They sound drowned by the production, but once its remastered I could actually hear this playing on the radio.
Very nice work. I don't wanna sound vapid but I'm mainly interested in commercial music (I'm trying to get in the music business) so yeah this definitely has commercial appeal. But answer the question lol... I'm guessing you're the singer?
Your voice is fine but the mixer needs to make it louder.
But the song is mixed and mastered though...we tracked out all the vocals and mixed it with the tracked out files of the production. I even compared my song to the other artist on VEVO and it sounded great. And thanks for the feedback, that's what we were going for, a commerical radio friendly song. Although, my strength is writing dark songs.
I'm not sure if I uploaded the wrong quality, cause I have 1411kbps and 8.70mb, which is one better or it doesn't matter?
But the song is mixed and mastered though...we tracked out all the vocals and mixed it with the tracked out files of the production. I even compared my song to the other artist on VEVO and it sounded great. And thanks for the feedback, that's what we were going for, a commerical radio friendly song. Although, my strength is writing dark music.
Yeah the vocals sound really low idk I'd suggest having him make it louder but that's just my own personal take back, everything else sounded good! You should post up other songs that you have though
Yeah the vocals sound really low idk I'd suggest having him make it louder but that's just my own personal take back, everything else sounded good! You should post up other songs that you have though
So do you think the production of the song covers up the vocals? I'm listening to it with my headphones and I hear the vocals clearly And thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it! I do have other songs, but I'm tryna get feedback on this song since we're releasing this as the first single. I'm little stressed out and there's a lot of pressure going on lol! I don't wanna flop, I wanna make this my career
Working on a production to this song starting tomorrow methinks
You Think Youre Ready
[Verse1]
I came to dance
Under neon lights
So take a chance
You’ll only get tonight
You think you’re ready
You think you’ll show me
But you ain’t ready
Maybe in your dreams
[Buildup]
Lose yourself tonight
It’s why you came here, right?
Lose yourself tonight
And I’ma find ya, aight?
[Chorus]
You think you’re ready
So I wanna see what you got
Yah come and get me
If you think you’ll come out on top
We’re breathin’ heavy
Movin’ steady
Rockin’ under the lights
We’re gettin’ closer
Your composure
By the end of the night
You’ll be lost in me
Just wait and see
You think you’re ready
So I wanna see what you got
[Verse 2]
I came to play
I made this game
Say what you’ll say
But I feel no shame
The world ain’t ready
For what’s yet to come
So come and get me
If you’re wantin’ some
[Buildup]
Lose yourself tonight
It’s why you came here, right?
Lose yourself tonight
And I’ma find ya, aight?
Lose yourself tonight
It’s why you came here, right?
Lose yourself tonight
And I’ma find ya, aight?
[Chorus]
You think you’re ready
So I wanna see what you got
Yah come and get me
If you think you’ll come out on top
We’re breathin’ heavy
Movin’ steady
Rockin’ under the lights
We’re gettin’ closer
Your composure
By the end of the night
You’ll be lost in me
Just wait and see
You think you’re ready
So I wanna see what you got
[Instumental Bridge]
[Buildup]
Lose yourself tonight
It’s why you came here, right?
Lose yourself tonight
I’ma find ya, aight?
Lose yourself tonight
It’s why you came here, right?
Lose yourself tonight
I’ma find ya, aight?
[Chorus]
You think you’re ready
So I wanna see what you got
Yah come and get me
If you think you’ll come out on top
We’re breathin’ heavy
Movin’ steady
Rockin’ under the lights
We’re gettin’ closer
Your composure
By the end of the night
You’ll be lost in me
Just wait and see
You think you’re ready
So I wanna see what you got
I wrote this like 2 or so years ago, yet I still find myself singing the chorus sometimes. I do believe it's about time I actually bring my idea to life.
Realised that when I uploaded this video that the thread was dead so I never posted this here.
But since it's alive again I'll post it now
This is a song called Nicotine, I wrote it to tell the story of a woman I once knew who had a very extreme smoking addiction (like 40 a day) and suffered severe depression and when diagnosed with illnesses related to smoking she just carried on smoking and smoking etc and it was because she didn't see any reason to stop and live longer for.
Anyway yeah, bit of a sad song but when I've been performing it I've had really great responses with people telling me the song has inspired them to stop smoking and I even received a fb message a couple of weeks ago by somebody that said my song inspired them to stop telling me they had been smoke free for 3 months!
Does anybody else's throat burns when laying down vocals in the studio? Am I doing something wrong? I heard not to drink anything cold. I heard honey is good for vocals. But everytime I start rehearsing for vocals, after about 3 tries, my throat burns/itches. 😩
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Originally posted by HausofNiko
^^^ mine does too
Be careful of what you're eating beforehand. Any dairy product is not good for you. I once knew a guy who would drink three glasses of milk before he sang.
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Originally posted by theoyella jukebox
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“Breadcrumbs”
Why do people have to die
Before I say hello
It’s like they never even matter
I want you to brush by me on the road
To see your eyes see mine once
Once I had a chance to say goodbye
Though now the moment’s gone
All the great people I’ll never meet
They never even matter
All the grand people I’ll never greet
They’ll never get much better
Than what they got
I want to share my crumbs with you
To have to push time away from you
I wish you could have me just close enough
But I can’t suspend time here forever
Don’t leave me behind again
Why do I have to die alone
Why do I have to die unknown
I lov that second to last stanza, especially the first line Wish I wrote this.
Be careful of what you're eating beforehand. Any dairy product is not good for you. I once knew a guy who would drink three glasses of milk before he sang.
I lov that second to last stanza, especially the first line Wish I wrote this.
Oh ****, I didn't know this 😮 Why isn't it good for you? No wonder lol
From personal experience, I've always been told to avoid anything dairy-related, soda and things that will dry you out. Also don't have cough drops, they're really really bad for singing.
wants to post but is afraid of embarrassment and theft
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should be sung swiftly and in 3/4 time, I wrote it to the tune of "Killing Me" by Little Dragon.
I just don't wanna go another summer without you, baby.
As much as I loved the sunny days of thinking of you,
I can't go on no more long walks in the park with the thought of you, baby.
Can I see you?
You know I done heard a whole lot of crazy things about you, baby.
I swear I don't care if they're right about your attitude (lmao)
I'll take a chance cause without you I'm feeling like zero, baby.
Can you be the one? Can we be two?
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Effective if that's what you were going for!
So far, I've gotten 10 positive reviews and none that are negative of this song from friends and family. But I think they're tryna be too nice. I hate my voice. 
the song is nice, only main suggestion is the vocals need to be mixed louder. They sound drowned by the production, but once its remastered I could actually hear this playing on the radio. 
idk I'd suggest having him make it louder but that's just my own personal take back, everything else sounded good! You should post up other songs that you have though 
I'm listening to it with my headphones and I hear the vocals clearly 
Wish I wrote this.