It's a great start. I like what I hear so far, and I assume this is just a rough template and you're going to put in stronger instruments later on. What program are you using. ?
I do think the part around 2:18 where the notes climb up the scale are clashing with the key though. Is that in key or was it out of key for some like dissonance or whatever? Even if technically is in key, it just sounds jarring to me, and I would change it.
It's a great start. I like what I hear so far, and I assume this is just a rough template and you're going to put in stronger instruments later on. What program are you using. ?
I do think the part around 2:18 where the notes climb up the scale are clashing with the key though. Is that in key or was it out of key for some like dissonance or whatever? Even if technically is in key, it just sounds jarring to me, and I would change it.
Ableton Live 8 
And yeah, that part just sounds off to me 