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DR3ch
Member Since: 11/6/2011
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Good Lyrics?
I've been writing on my debut album for almost a year now and I wanted to share some lyrics and ask for your opinion:
The song is called "I wish I could love like this" and here are some lyrics from it:
"Your love was coming strong, while I was moving on
away from the touch I was desperate for"
"You were just too good for me, but you saw a god in me"
If you have any tipps please share.
Factory_bitch
Member Since: 11/18/2010
Posts: 2,109
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the second one is cringeworthy
the first is very good imo
Nait Phoenix
Member Since: 10/18/2010
Posts: 29,224
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It sounds nice enough… embellish on "you saw a god in me" a little so that the line remains strong…
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