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Tournament: PLΔTINUM HIT 7
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Originally posted by Pecinta Mariah
improvise like add "ah" or "oh"
learning from dupri
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I could pull an Ashanti/Mariah and add "baby"  .
How is yours going?
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Originally posted by Sam
If you're happier with the original, go with that, but just keep working on that line. It WILL come eventually. You just need to find a way to convey the same message with a different arrangement of lyrics (which is obviously easier said than done most of the time). 
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Just send my song through to Truth Teller.  Hopefully I've done enough to make it through the first round! |
I've literally rearranged the whole verse because of that line haha. Would you be willing to read the old and new version and give me some feedback?
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Originally posted by Sam
If you're happier with the original, go with that, but just keep working on that line. It WILL come eventually. You just need to find a way to convey the same message with a different arrangement of lyrics (which is obviously easier said than done most of the time).
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Just sent my song through to Truth Teller. Hopefully I've done enough to make it through the first round! |
You didn't, your song is really really bad 
I'll read it later, cause I'm scoring the first 20 entries now 
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Originally posted by Buyonce1814
I've literally rearranged the whole verse because of that line haha. Would you be willing to read the old and new version and give me some feedback? |
If you're looking for a second opinion I'd be happy to take a look at what you have so far, sure.
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
You didn't, your song is really really bad
I'll read it later, cause I'm scoring the first 20 entries now |
I'm honestly so shocked and disappointed. Good competing with y'all!
Have fun with that!
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Originally posted by Sam
Only the truth.  What's yours? |
Top 3: C'Mon, Last Goodbye & Thinking Of You (I guess, never really thought of my top 3)
Bottom 3: Wonderland, Out Alive & Gold Trans Am (that's hard)
I literally like every song and I know the bottom would be Wonderland, but the others, I'm not sure about. Warrior is one of my favourite albums, along with Louder by Lea Michele (which is out on iTunes now!)
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Originally posted by JustLuke
Top 3: C'Mon, Last Goodbye & Thinking Of You (I guess, never really thought of my top 3)
Bottom 3: Wonderland, Out Alive & Gold Trans Am (that's hard)
I literally like every song and I know the bottom would be Wonderland, but the others, I'm not sure about. Warrior is one of my favourite albums, along with Louder by Lea Michele (which is out on iTunes now!)
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So why did you critique me when we have 3/6 in the same position? 
Thinking of You is also good, but it's not my favourite. I much prefer Out Alive and Gold Trans Am! Out Alive's lyrics are actually really great. 
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I'm standing on my own two feet,
Somewhere hangin' in between,
My life and the death of me.
Fate doesn't leave us time to waste,
Weaving through the human race,
Till we run out of air to breathe.
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Even her dance pop songs have substance. 
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Around 30 entries are in 
There are 2 that I haven't read yet, but among the rest, some of you shocked me with how effortlessly you took your songs to the next level and it's only round 1. There are 4 songs that make me feel like we're 3 weeks away from the finale 
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Originally posted by Sam
So why did you critique me when we have 3/6 in the same position?
Thinking of You is also good, but it's not my favourite. I much prefer Out Alive and Gold Trans Am! Out Alive's lyrics are actually really great. |
Because it's not the same as mine and you put Wherever You Are in the bottom 
I love Thinking Of You, it's so rocky and Pop and I love this:
I was down for you hardcore,
While you were out trying to score,
Found out you’re full of it,
I’m over it, so suck my ****.
When I sing that verse, whew do I feel ****ing amazing 
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
Around 30 entries are in
There are 2 that I haven't read yet, but among the rest, some of you shocked me with how effortlessly you took your songs to the next level and it's only round 1. There are 4 songs that make me feel like we're 3 weeks away from the finale |
Aw, bless. Thank you.
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
Around 30 entries are in
There are 2 that I haven't read yet, but among the rest, some of you shocked me with how effortlessly you took your songs to the next level and it's only round 1. There are 4 songs that make me feel like we're 3 weeks away from the finale |
Way to calm my nerves
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Originally posted by Buyonce1814
Way to calm my nerves |
I believe in you though. You're already an acclaimed songwriter in the lambily, so I'm sure you can blow us away 
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
Around 30 entries are in
There are 2 that I haven't read yet, but among the rest, some of you shocked me with how effortlessly you took your songs to the next level and it's only round 1. There are 4 songs that make me feel like we're 3 weeks away from the finale |
Hopefully mine doesn't get lost in the crowd now that I've waited so long to submit.
And this is good news. Can't wait to read the comments and see who the strongest competition is out of the gate!
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
I believe in you though. You're already an acclaimed songwriter in the lambily, so I'm sure you can blow us away |
The pressure  . I'm actually excited though.
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Originally posted by JustLuke
Because it's not the same as mine and you put Wherever You Are in the bottom
I love Thinking Of You, it's so rocky and Pop and I love this:
I was down for you hardcore,
While you were out trying to score,
Found out you’re full of it,
I’m over it, so suck my ****.
When I sing that verse, whew do I feel ****ing amazing |
That is probably one of the highlights of ToY tbh. It reminds me of Kiss N Tell in a way.
Woohha-a-ohooh, You got a secret
Woohha-a-ohooh, You couldn't keep it
Woohha-a-ohooh, Somebody leaked it
And now some ***** about to go down
Which is one of my favourite songs on Animal.
However Wherever You Are is literal trash, her worst released song. It's so bland and basic and you can tell that Dr. Luke wrote 90% of the lyrics and forced her to sing it (I'm pretty sure this is confirmed). It's so basic, literally anyone could sing it... Katy, Bonnie, Selena, Britney etc. It just doesn't have anything that makes me think, "Wow, this is so a Kesha song." 
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Um... Wherever You Are is a certified bop.
Nothin' lasts forever,
But I will always remember,
Those nights we spent together,
Wherever, wherever.
Wherever you are,
Wherever you are,
Love will never die,
Wherever you are,
(Wherever you are).
Yesssss Kesha
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nty she has better bops that she actually doesn't hate and wasn't forced to sing.
I'll feel pretty dumb if I don't make it through this round because I've given so many people advice and if they all make it through and I don't, that's just a mess. Let the self-doubt and meltdowns begin!
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Forced to sing blah blah blah, Dr. Luke knew what he was doing and because of that, she made a bop. 
I wish I was good enough to write a masterpiece like it 
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Let's talk about a song that Luke had a hand in writing that is actually incredible, Animal. Kesha's magnum opus. Literally my inspiration. I wish to write a song as good as THAT some day.
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